u/DeepAd6670

Hi all! so I’m currently building my portfolio to start looking for an apprenticeship in the near future and would like some feedback on a piece I worked on today!
I was catching up on the new episode of euphoria when this scene caught my eye and i just had to draw it, my question to you guys is what can I do to improve this piece before adding it to my portfolio?
Thank you in advance for any advice!