u/ELtash

Hi, I’ve recently gotten into writing as a hobby. I’m now looking for some proper feedback to give me an idea of what I am doing well plus the areas that are still leaving a lot to be desired. Open to all thoughts/critique on my opening chapter relating to prose, character, tone, structure and pacing. And finally just general level of engagement you have while reading, would you want to keep reading on? Be as brutal and to the point as you wish as that is likely the only way I am going to drastically improve. (For context this is a grimdark, low fantasy, late medieval period setting.)

I’ve already received some excellent critique/encouragement on my 1st completed thorough edit, this is my updated 2nd pass through of the opening after working through the issues that had been highlighted and with any luck having put them right. Hoping by posting here I will have some fresh eyes and new insight, that can help me further perfect the chapter and get it into a place where I can mark it complete.

Thanks in advance to anyone who takes the time out of their day to read(however much they get through), comment or interact with the post in anyway. It’s all greatly appreciated. :)

Hi, I’ve recently gotten into writing as a hobby. But am now looking to get into it more seriously, so I am looking for some proper feedback. Open to all thoughts/critique on my opening chapter relating to prose, character, tone, structure and pacing. And finally just general level of engagement you have while reading, would you want to keep reading on?

I’ve wrote quite a few chapters and bounced between a couple books, but this is the 1st time I’ve properly sat down to do a thorough line by line edit of a chapter and get it into some sort of shape I’d consider readable/presentable.

I think I’ve picked up on all the typos, spelling mistakes or grammatical errors, but if any have slipped through the edit please point them out.