The Spitter-17 Pages
Title: The Spitter
Format: Film
Page Length: 17 pages so far.
Genres: Horror, Drama, Body Horror
Logline: A man with saliva so powerful it burns anyone who comes in contact with it, takes justice into his own hands by setting up predator stings a la Chris Hansen and using his unique gift to become judge, jury, and executioner.
Feedback Concerns:
Does the premise feel like it could lose its weight quickly?
In this first draft(not in the pages posted) I reveal that Ulysses was a victim of S.A. I'm worried however that this coupled with the overall premise of the movie could come across too heavy for the sake of being too heavy.
This obviously starts with him as a baby but I quickly jump forward to the present day immediately in the next scene. His mom only shows up briefly(non-speaking) in a flashback. Would you want to see more of her?
Lastly is the premise too out there to be something other than plain bloody horror?
I've never done this before so if anything is off either in my script or in what I wrote in the body text please let me know! Or if you have clarifiying questions regarding either please ask!