Is it worth continuing or putting down?
I have finally decided to seriously write a novel, and I have finished the first draft. But before I do cruelly edit my manuscript, I'd like to hear your thoughts on my opening paragraph.
I believe the opening sentence/paragraph instantly tells the reader whether the story will be any good or the writer knows what they're doing with their work. So, I'd very much like to get a feedback on mine.
Opening Paragraph
Prologue I: Finger
“For twenty-nine days straight, Lance dreamed of a burning finger. He knew it was his, but he didn't know why. He would wake up either relieved or frightened of it, marred with sleep marks or pooled in his own sweat. There were nights when he forced himself not to sleep, but he failed every time. It was as if his body didn't care about his dreams, just as long as he got at least nine hours of sleep, being a nine-year-old after all.”
Have fun critiquing :-))))