u/Big_Bat_1663

Hi! I was hoping to get some advice on how to sharpen my first page, or any general writing advice. Thank you!

Helloooo! I was wondering if I could get some feedback on my first page?

I’m fairly confident in what follows for the rest of the chapter. I’d like to know if this interests you! If you’d like to give any advice, I’d be very, very happy. Thank you for taking the time to read it.