u/BloodAnonymous

Hello.

Do want to stress, Im not asking for someone to go back to my old post and criticize it now. I'm asking for future reference.

I do genuinely want to get help and improve. Rather not, stew in an echo chamber. So when this first draft of my book/novel is finished and i start my 2nd draft. Hoping I might get a better chance of, well, any feedback. For better or worse, this is a subject I want to write about, sadly...

I realized the subject matter, might not be for everyone. Thinking I might give a chapter that doesn't handle the subject matter? Though, any synopsis for missing context will still have to be explain, that the subject matter happen.

Thank you for your time. Have a wonderful day.

Graphic Content Note; Both chapters deals with a death via >!suicide!<, one leading into a reincarnation story line and other to civil unrest. Please be safe.

Hello new writer here, I'm currently trying write a fantasy book, in attempts to improve myself. Need help. Because of the subject matter don't want to involve anyone who knows me. Been burned before for less.

The two and a half chapters I've included uses different writing styles, and I wanted feedback on what works and what doesn't so I can improve going forward. Also, want outside opinions, to avoid being in my own echo chamber.

Chapter 1 is written in first person and follows the "main" lead thoughts. Chapter 5 is third person limited and follows the lead's new mother before the events of Chapter 1.

Whenever you see < > those are placeholder markers for myself to 'CTRL f' and replace with proper text.

I know this is the 1st rough draft. It can take as many attempts before I'm finished. Doubt is just fun... Sometimes a good push to keep going is needed.

Thank you for reading regardless and have a wonderful day. Stay safe.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1FoomVZQ6V7z-cWW63FMSIqI0KpiaBqibFQntR3FSIEI/edit?usp=sharing

Small note; Prose will be rough, don't have AC and it's currently 95°F/35°C and going without sleep. Sorry.

Bigger Note, the graphical content; Both chapters deals with a death via >!suicide!<, one leading into a reincarnation story line and other to civil unrest. Please be safe.

Hello, I'm currently trying write a fantasy book, in attempts to improve myself. Need help. Because of the subject matter don't want to involve anyone who knows me. Been burned before for less.

Google has some information I rather not display with said topics above. Reason why I asked about ProWritingAid.

The two and a half chapters I've included use different writing styles, and I wanted feedback on what works and what doesn't so I can improve going forward. Chapter 1 is written in first person and follows the "main" lead. Chapter 5 is third person limited and follows that lead's mother, in the time before the events of Chapter 1. Posted these two because i think they are the better examples for what I have. And chapter 6 is a work in progress now...

Whenever you see < > those are placeholder markers for myself to 'ctrl f' and replace with proper text.

I know this is the 1st rough draft. It can take as many attempts before I'm finished. Doubt is fun. Sometimes a good push to keep going is needed.

Thank you for reading regardless and have a wonderful day. Stay safe.

https://app.prowritingaid.com?id=zJVZngx1JZ