u/Brilliant-Mistake821

im stuck at the conclusion ARGHHHH, can anyone read it and give any suggestions? for context this is a uni english class. i haven't written essays in a while and this is basically a redemption of sorts. feel free to suggest anything!!!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1tkf6T-rE1B2GnFPd8DZUpOCauwdfrV7oCxzHc0Rl3oQ/edit?usp=sharing