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[2,057] The North Piper
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This is my first time posting my work on this thread, and I'm excited to hear what critiques you all have for me. This is a first draft, so feel free to absolutely shred my work apart! I'm hardheaded, so nitpick away!
A couple of questions I have:
- Are my promises established? For example, do you understand the tone of my story, the setup, and the need for the Piper/Aide system? Is there anything you are confused about or would like to see extra description/clarity on?
- Overall, is this interesting? Do you find it original and striking, or are you seeing overused tropes or phrases? Is this something you would actually read for fun?
- Any more helpful insights are welcome! I'm here to learn and grow. I've been writing for around 5 years now and have never mustered up the courage to show others my work. With that being said, though, please don't hold back! Thank you ahead of time for looking at my work and taking the time to read it.