College Essay Help
I’m working on my Common App essay this summer and trying to finalize my hook and topic before I start writing next week. I’d really appreciate feedback on clarity, flow, and whether the hook is engaging or if I should change direction. I’m still in the early stages, so any honest feedback helps a lot.
Draft Hook:
Beep. Beep. The sound of my cochlear implant batteries right before they gave out in the middle of a loud classroom. Instantly, the classroom went silent but only from my point of view. For a second, I just sat there, no sense of panic but instead a strange calm. I began to read everyone’s faces, examining each body movement and figuring out what they were saying. As I got older, I learned to use that same habit to read the room and understand happening around me.