Would you read this of your own free will
this is just the starting page of a short story ive been writing i don't think this has a good reason for one to keep on reading, i could be wrong, but if i am right could you give me some tips on how i could improve it also ill be copying and pasting this from a doc i wrote it on so there wont be any indents like i originally put in
A Mother, a Child, and a Father. The Child dressed brightly, the
Mother with just grays and blacks, and the Father wearing grays,
blacks and whites. The pavement leads them step by step to a new bend
in the road while the sun assaults them with its light.
"This is surely my chance!" A nearby figure believed whilst
silently watching the family approach them. Meanwhile, The family
tries to hide under a Tree's sweeping arms. They rest for a moment
from the wrath of the sun, until a deep scraping voice pops up from
nowhere.
"Strange weather we're having! The wind is strong right now, yet
it's terribly hot. I'm glad to have somebody to talk to though! So how
has your day been, what are you doing in the park at this time-"
The Tree speaks with enjoyment as the family jolts from the unexpected
voice and looks around.
"Oh please don't be afraid! It's just me, the Tree behind you!"
"What-What the hell? What sick prank is this! Come out! You're
scaring my child!" The Father circled around the Tree and looked up
into the Tree's leaves searching for whoever was speaking.
"Oh no, this isn't a prank please don't be scared-"
The Father grabs the child, takes the mother's hand, then flees.
The Father's tense silhouette becomes smaller and smaller the closer
his family runs back to the city as the Tree calls out to them.
"What!? Come back! I thought you wanted to hide from the weather!?
People rarely come close enough
to see me speak, did I scare you!? I'mquite sorry!" But it was already too late for the Tree, for the family
had evidently ran off never to approach the tree again.
The Tree had never truly understood why humans ran from them, yes
it may have been that it was disturbing to have a tree of all things
talking to you, but that didn't mean that they couldn't still chat!
"Humans are such strange things, maybe I should try to ease them
into my being able to talk! Like making little noises! Yes! I'll try that next time!"