u/Fit-Entrance-1111

Kinky-ish short poem

Hi guys kind of new to this all but just curious if I could get possible "professional" feedback on how to improve it maybe??? Thanks a lot if you can.

It's like a kink but I'm sure,

I need her,

I need her more,

At her soul I knaw,

Down to the core,

The way she makes my heart race,

I need her more,

I like the way she makes me feel for sure,

Her hand around my neck, secure,

To be completely in love with the allure,

I need her more,

When I drop to me Knees I plead for her,

The urge to F**ck her like I want to breed her,

She calls me "pathetic" like a slur,

Trap me in your love potion,

Everything feels like it's in slow motion,

like a blurred memory,

Of her repetitive motion,

As I yearn for her more,

In my heart I am sure,

I need her,

I need her more.

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u/Fit-Entrance-1111 — 4 days ago