u/Global-Rock-3629

Hello! this is my third draft of this poem i've been working on and off for about a month now. Would love any suggestions on what people and think and shit thank you. I haven't really done anything like this so apologies for the informality lmao

20 feet out somewhere in the distance I see
a horse with a cracked clay coat shining like holy light
it almost burns my eyes
your muscles tensed something fierce
about to break off into a sprint 
Look at you go little stallion look at you go

its hair is blowing back fighting against the wind
I can see something in it's eyes pupils dilated
you're scared but you go on
fear isn't inherent in your system like mine
majestic Fabio, you fight against the gods
Look at you go brave little stallion look at you go

it makes me want to hold on with all my might
clench that mane by the small hairs and ride with you
maybe majesty will rub off on me
but I know I'll let go hit the dirt and roll 
the dust will kick up and I'll see you blister into the sun
I'll watch you go little stallion I'll watch you go