Is this story good I just want a bit of criticism and if it’s bad tell me the truth please let me know so I can revise and fix where it’s bad
The world is a towering structure of seven distinct dimensions where gods, angels, devils, and phantoms rule from elite bloodlines. Humans occupy the very middle tier—the gritty, industrial slums of Lirkush—lacking the wings, horns, or magical masks of the upper races. In this world, there are no easy status screens or level-ups; power is earned through raw, bone-breaking physical sweat, and overusing your magic results in a lethal physical toll known as Mana Burn.
The story follows sixteen-year-old Hendrix Köingkaaizer, a low-ranking commoner who trains in secret every night with his late brother's shattered sword. Despite a fractured family and the brutal oppression of the upper classes, Hendrix forces himself to wear a permanent, unblinking smile at all times—a psychological armor vowed to honor his brother's memory.
When the fragile balance of the tower shatters, Hendrix is thrust into the prestigious Red Blossom Academy alongside a cold, elite hybrid rival named Zephyr and a brilliant, melancholic tactician named Ruby. Together, this squad of rookies must face terrifying frontlines, eccentric masters, and a global war where high-ranking devils literally drop out of the sky like meteors. Armed with raw physical conditioning and a hidden, catastrophic gravity magic, Hendrix sets out on a grim path to shatter the global hierarchy, climb the stacked tower, and challenge the absolute rule of the Wizard King's throne.