u/InternationalWin5063

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This is the first chapter of my supernatural romance novel, so you should be able to go in cold. My goal here is to introduce my narrator and then veer right into her story.

I need to grow, so give me anything you’re willing to. I need my writing torn apart. Mods, I humbly request that rule #7 be suspended for the duration of this post.

I am very self-conscious about my transition from internal monologue to the start of the story. Let me know: Is it smooth enough or too clunky?

Long Nights - Chapter 1