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This is the first chapter of my supernatural romance novel, rewritten based on feedback from the first time I posted it.

Long Nights - Chapter 1 Revised

I need to grow, so give me anything you’re willing to, plus: Is my main character interesting? Likeable? Is the transition to the dream handled smoothly enough?

For the mods: crit 2984

This is the first chapter of my domestic suspense novel, so you should be able to go in cold. My goal here is to introduce my narrator and set up my main characters to meet.

Give me whatever you like, plus: does it hook you? Is it exciting, interesting, funny, boring?

All Along - Chapter One

Payment for the mods: crit 1646

crit 1115 crit 2700

This is the first chapter of my supernatural romance novel, so you should be able to go in cold. My goal here is to introduce my narrator and then veer right into her story.

I need to grow, so give me anything you’re willing to. I need my writing torn apart. Mods, I humbly request that rule #7 be suspended for the duration of this post.

I am very self-conscious about my transition from internal monologue to the start of the story. Let me know: Is it smooth enough or too clunky?

Long Nights - Chapter 1