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New writer having problems building tension
This is for a scifi style book that I've been kicking around for a while. I've finally put hand to keyboard but have found it a bit lacking. I'm having a hard time making the build up of the explosion really build up.
The main character of the story is originally supposed to be curious but as the (unknown to her) railgun shot gets closer. she is supposed to become more concerned. I don't think I'm capturing it very well here and after staring at it for a few days decided to post.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PjMr6If8orGGsTCq3Ya2qohcc0wCJpj5oCiyCZ12XsY/edit?usp=sharing
u/KingOfShitMountan — 9 days ago