u/Kitsuko_Dragonstar

Hello Hello dear readers, hope you're well.
This weekend chapter / part/ snippet 16 will not be posted, I'd like to inform you all that the chapter has been written but just not edited yet so do not fear.
I'd also like to remind you all that both me and my top notch editor are both still in high school so I'd like to ask for your understanding when we have our burn outs or moments of struggle, but we hope to keep producing chapters and to spread the world into the flute and the bard to bring hopes and joy to you all, sincerely.
Yours.

Now for the question

1. Should I give me side character’s more lore and personal, like one of my characters at the moment (Morgan) I gave 2 whole chapters to herself but she still feels like another background character.

2. How do I “show, don’t tell”

3. And what are some pointers

Morgan stands at the entrance with a bag in hand, walks in, and heads to take her seat among the other on watchers and sits back. A white line of pure magic appears at the center of the colosseum and expands up to make a screen-like rectangle as a commentator appears to greet the watchers.
“Welcome, welcome one and all to today's well formed event, Today we will have match after match until sun down!”
Kiria sighs as she steps onto the ring entices as she starts to walk forward to the light and puts her cloak hoodie over her ears, flute in hand with daggers at her side.
“As most of you know, today is about fun and laughs and maybe blood,” the commentator nudges the air and welcomes the first round
“Let’s give a warm welcome to…” the commentator looks over the sheet.
“Ki-rah?” He repeats like a novice.
“Kiria Greywood,” She corrects as she walks into the colosseum ring, all eyes focused on her as she walks out with a hood and holding only her flute.
“Ah, right. Kiria Greywood! And to your left, Jinn the Vast!” He exclaims as a man that seems to be in his early 20’s walks out with decked out armor and a grand sword walks out of the challenge entrance. Kiria looks up and bats an eye.
“Oh?” Her ears perked up, pulling her hood down to reveal her ears, signing shes gonna give this her all,
“I'm fighting a little girl? Hah! You’ve gotta be kidding me,” he rants as the commentator rings the bell. Kiria plays a steady overly calm tone with her flute as Jinn walks to her slowly dragging his sword like a barbarian.
“Little girl.. I’ll give you the choice to leave walking,” Kiria just plays as unknowing to Jinn, as his shadow gets bigger under him. Kiria reaches a note as the sword gets sucked into the shadow under him, but Jinn just pulls it out to cut the shadow with a magic spell.
“Play times over little girl” Jinn kicks Kiria, hard enough to send her flying, her back hitting the Colosseum wall. Morgan gasps covering her mouth as she watches.
“Kids thinking they can make it with some dumb dreams,” Jinn walks over slowly like before and again dragging his sword.
Erika watched with gritted teeth from the arena entrance.
“I-I’m not a kid,” Kiria grunted with gritted teeth, reaching into her pocket to place the golden wings shes gotten from hermes to her ankles. She gets up and in a blink of an eye, she disappears. Appearing behind Jinn, she returns the favor, kicking him right into the wall after she slid her flute back behind her into a harness to keep it on hold.
Morgan and Erika both sigh in relief as Kiria uses the walls to bounce off of them to completely disappear, only being seen as a flash of light going from wall to wall, landing blows to tire out her opponent. She stops and leaning against the Arena wall.
“What's the matter Mr. the Vast” She says as Jinn leans against his sword, gasping for air. “I know your lies.” Jinn stares at her and yells and charges at her with the intent to kill.
“You don’t know-"
“I see the blood on your hands,” Kiria says bluntly as the gand sword comes down to her as if in an instant she draws one of her daggers from her sides and parries. Jinn falls back in utter fear
“I smell your sins,” Kiria said as she took the grand sword with one hand to raise it as Jinn struggled to hold the blade with both hands.
“This sword deserves better…” She says, as like the Arrow of Light in Morgan's back like before, Kiria turned the huge blade into bits of floating Mana that resemble balls of light as she took them for herself and absorbed them.
“The winner of round one…Kiria Greywood!” the announcer exclaims as Kiria walks back into the entrance she came from raising her arm in victory. Kiria returns as Erika runs up to hugs her tight as Kiria goes limp in her arms.
“Kiria… Kiria!” Erika cried as she carried Kiria to the infirmary

The sun rose and Morgan was still fast asleep as Kiria woke, shaking Erika awake and smiling.
“Hey, wake up sleepyhead,” she said, Erika getting up and rubbing her eyes.
Kiria headed to the bathroom to wash her face. After she started packing her bag with her things, her twin Daggers, water, snacks and waited for Erika.
“Where are you going?” Erika mumbled and yawned.
“Training, no time to chat, meet you downstairs” Kiria jumps down the stairs and bursts out the Inns entrance, greeting the morning with a smile brighter than her usual light smile.
Erika got down with her things packed.
“Where this time?” Erika asks as Kiria replies swiftly.
“The town's colosseum,” Erika looked confused at Kiria’s excited joy.
“This town has one?”
“Yea, it’s all the way at the center of the town. Now come on!”
Kiria sprinted as Erika followed with a light jog.
After a few back and forths, Erika and Kiria stand at the entrance. 
“There” 
Kiria signs up for a competition for a butt load of money as the winning prize.
“Do I gotta?” Erika asks as Kiria just writes both of their names down
“No? Guess not,” Erika sighs and smiles. After some chatter, she and Kiria high five and walk different directions.
Morgan got up and headed down to greet the inn keeper who sits down in the lounge. The Inn keeper brings her a coffee shortly after.
“Rough night?” The keeper asks as Morgan sips her coffee.
“Mhm” 
Morgan groaned as the inn keeper suggesting a break or a day out.
“Did you hear about the thing going on today?”
Morgan raised an eyebrow as she's curious and a bit confused just as Erika was.
“Whats going on today?”
“At the colosseum in the town center, there’s gonna be some fights going down and blah blah yea. That’s all I really know,”
Morgan finished her coffee and sighed
“Ugh, sure, why not”
Morgan thanks the inn keeper for the coffee and heads down to the colosseum after some time as Kiria and Erika get back together to look at their respected challenger.
Kiria looked at the brackets and shifted her head like an owl to the side.
“Looks like im fighting sone named Jinn,”
Erika nods as she looks at her bracket.
“Looks like I'm fighting… somebody named Fei” she runs her chin and nods.
“Interesting name,” Kiria noted as she prepped for her changer as Erika does the same.

The return Prologue 

Kiria the Kitsune, once rejected by those she held dear now blessed by the god of trade and travelers Hermes, returns to continue her adventures with Erika Piper the Bard blessed by Apollo, the God of music, and Morgan, the half human half elf. From the first town of unknown where she met Erika and Morgan, after facing  some "issues,” now the trio are in the town of Hail-Fall as Morgan has her unconscious melt down after her encounter with the “angelic” being, having gotten an offer any fool would have accepted.

Continuing from chapter 12 of writers cafe- 

Morgan wakes up in the middle of the night drenched in sweat as she rubs her eyes and heads to her bathroom to wash her face. Morgan walks out of her room to check in on Erika and Kiria's room as they sleep soundlessly. She heads out, still dressed in her night gown, and heads out of the inn to stand at the front yard staring into the night sky as she allows tears to slowly trickle down her face. Kiria stretches while waking up and yawns as she turns to see Erika sleeping sweetly on the other bed. Her ears twitch as she hears Morgan and gets out the bed to see her out the window. Kiria rubs her eyes as they adjust and sees an Arrow of pure light in Morgan's back as she realizes what’s in front of her. Kiria runs into Megan's room to see the room is not just a mess, but also sees her sheets drenched in sweat. She heads outside as she processes what's happening to where Morgan stands in silence with tears running down Morgan's face.

 “You should let go," Kira said in a cold, unliving tone as she ripped the Arrow out of Morgan's back. 

“Right…” Morgan wiped away her tears and sighed, turning back and looking at unholy looking Kiria, her eyes crimson bloodshot, glowing red, and her ears perked up with a blank expression, compared to the droopy eared warm smiling Kiria she knew… this wasn’t Kiria. As if Morgan blinked, Kiria was returning to her warm smiling droopy eared self in an instant as she held the arrow of pure light. Morgan could not see and dissipated it to bits of mana she absorbed. 

“You shouldn't play with angels,” Kiria said playfully and sweetly with her usual kind and sweet tone.

“You truly are something special and out of this world huh?” Morgan said as Kiria just yawned, turned and headed back to her room. Kiria sighed and threw herself back onto her bed, curling into her sheets, drifting back to sleep as Morgan headed back into her room to clean it from her little unconscious rampage.