Interested in seeing thoughts on my short story! ~6k Words
I wrote this short story a few months ago and the theme as a whole is very important to me. I wouldn't call it NSFW in terms of explicit content, but there are sexual themes within it, including references to masturbation and sex (sex slightly more detailed but not erotically), detailed sexualization of women, and briefly mentions sexual abuse.
It's also important to note that the typos and grammatical errors, especially early on, are there on purpose, including comma splices and homophone mishaps!
Also pretty important to note that my name is Vincent. This ties in to the theme as a whole and how personal I find it.
I'm really just looking to see what other people think about it, and I really wanted to share it in general. I don't feel the best about the ending, and I think some pacing is odd, so really any feedback is welcome! Also interested to see people's thoughts on my use of syntax and diction, as it was a very experimental piece for me.
I've included the Google Docs link. I've seen most people post page screenshots, but I'm visually impaired and have my text size huge, so it's sort of a hassle to change it around. Not sure if screenshots are preferred or if links are disallowed (pretty sure they're not), so if they're not, let me know! I'm happy to go through the hassle of getting screenshots if links are too annoying to deal with.