u/Lil-Ruby13524

Full Verse. Rating and feedback please.

I would like to see our mortal lives immortified,

Life is short and sweet exploring former ties and horrify,

I explore the mortal mind,

Past the highest contour lines,

Bars that fly over your heads like rich when they on airlines,

Come long way from dissing anyone for airtime,

Now when you press play it’s cause you searching where to find,

Metaphors and clever lines,

Jealousy is hellified,

Even taking time to know our thoughts and minds is cross the line,

Artists losing substance for a hit and than your set for life,

People telling you that screaming “fuck the pay” is ill advice,

Maybe that’s the real advice,

Maybe that’s the real device by which we lose our children ‘fore they feel alright,

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u/Lil-Ruby13524 — 5 days ago

Freestyle

I like my raps extra intense,

put ten wack MC's back where they slept,

nine written verses to climb into a top 10

eight days left until my drive arrives,

I cried 7 times before I write the right words,

6 lyrical rappers I know kept the right verbs,

fuck a top 5 if the good prevail,

suckers rot, die when the goods on sale

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u/Lil-Ruby13524 — 5 days ago