Guys i need your help i am preparing for colleges and i need someone to plz review my essays and give me honest feedback cause i can't afford a counselor someone who got into a good college .
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Applying to NYUAD (ED1) + Northwestern, Duke, Wellesley, Richmond, nyu nyc.
Leaving out grades/scores on purpose — just want feedback on how the profile itself reads.
Extracurriculars:
Baking Founder & Head Baker — Started and run a home baking business from scratch. Handled everything from recipe development to pricing to client acquisition, and taught myself sales instincts along the way rather than learning them from a course.
Drama — Lead Actor, Playwright, Director — Acted, wrote, and directed for school productions. Learned how to build a story that actually moves people, then had to defend those choices to a cast and make them work on a stage.
MC / Event Host — Hosted events across my school, building comfort with a live audience and thinking on my feet.
Independent Visual Design — Self-taught, freelance-style visual design work outside of any class or club.
Farewell Committee — Lead Organizer — Ran logistics and creative direction for my school's farewell event.
Language Leader / Sash Recipient — Recognized for leadership tied to language proficiency at my school.
Research paper (independent project):
I am writing a research paper onhow digital platforms create economic opportunity for traditional craftswomen . The thesis argues that the "access-bridges" that actually help these women — NGOs, social enterprises, training programs are unevenly distributed and clustered near major cities, leaving craftswomen in smaller cities and villages largely uncovered. It's built section by section using my own primary research, including a first-hand case study with a craftswoman from my own village, layered with secondary sources.
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Stats: 80% in both Grade 9 and Grade 10.
Havent gotten my 11 grade result yet .
No SAT/ACT — applying test-optional across the board.
Citizenship: Dual Canadian/Pakistani, based in Pakistan, American-curriculum English-medium school.
Extracurriculars:
Baking Founder & Head Baker — ran my own home baking business
Drama — Lead Actor, Playwright, and Director
MC/Event Host
Event Committee — Lead Organizer
Language Leader (Sash Recipient)
Independent Visual Design & Mood Board Practice
Applying to:
NYU Abu Dhabi (ED1)
Northwestern
Duke
Wellesley
University of Richmond
NYU New York