u/RedShade88

Posting Pages 5–7 together this time so it’s easier to see how they flow into each other.

I’d appreciate any feedback on the pacing, readability, panel flow, anatomy, character consistency, and whether the scene is easy to follow.

I’m still working on cutting down random AI mistakes between pages, so feel free to point out anything that looks off or confusing. Thanks for checking it out.

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I revised Page 4 after receiving feedback that some of the AI-generated background additions made the panels feel cluttered.

I removed unnecessary signs, graffiti, repeated warnings, and other filler details so the characters and main story beats are easier to follow.

Does this version read more clearly? I’d especially appreciate feedback on:

• Panel flow
• Background clutter
• Dialogue placement
• Character consistency
• Whether the containment screen is still too text-heavy

Thanks to everyone who gave constructive feedback on the original version.

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Page 4 of my original manga, Madhouse Prison.

Beneath the prison, Elevator 18 descends into Tier-One Pyro Containment, where riots, contraband, fires, medical emergencies, and structural damage are treated like routine shift paperwork.

The Block 18 officers barely react when another containment breach erupts ahead of them. Their biggest concerns are overtime, ramen, and whether the warden expects reports before morning.

I’m looking for constructive feedback on:

• Text readability: Are the speech bubbles, signs, and control-screen text easy to read?
• Panel flow: Is it clear where your eyes should move from panel to panel?
• Character consistency: Do the officers look like the same people throughout the page?
• Anatomy and hands: Are there any awkward poses, fingers, faces, or body proportions?
• Background clarity: Does the prison feel detailed without becoming visually cluttered?
• Perspective and scale: Does the elevator shaft and Block 18 corridor feel deep and massive?
• Dialogue: Does the casual humor work against the dangerous situation?
• Story clarity: Can you understand what Block 18 is and why it is dangerous without extra explanation?
• Visual errors: Please point out any duplicated objects, fused details, unreadable lettering, or anything that looks out of place.

Honest feedback is welcome. I’m especially trying to improve readability, consistency, and environmental storytelling before continuing the next pages.

Story and characters by Rhae Pyre

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Hi everyone!

Continuing Chapter 1 of my original manga, MADHOUSE PRISON.

This is Page 3 of the opening chapter.

I'm a new manga creator and I'm sharing each page as I continue developing the series. I'd really appreciate honest, constructive feedback to help me improve.

I'm especially looking for feedback on:

• Panel flow and readability
• Composition and camera angles
• Dialogue placement and pacing
• Character expressions and poses
• Background detail
• Visual storytelling
• Anatomy, hands, perspective, or continuity errors
• Grammar, spelling, or formatting mistakes
• Anything that feels confusing or could be improved

Please be as honest as you'd like. I'd rather know what needs work so I can make future pages better.

Original story and characters by me. AI-assisted artwork. ChatGPT was used as a brainstorming and development tool during production.

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Continuing Chapter 1 of my original manga, MADHOUSE PRISON.

The story follows the staff and inmates of a supernatural prison built to contain some of the world's most dangerous beings.

This is Page 2 of Chapter 1.

Feedback is always appreciated, especially regarding:

• Readability
• Panel flow
• Pacing
• Worldbuilding
• Errors (from text to disfigured characters)
• Background art style (is it too grainy?

Original story and characters by me. AI-assisted artwork. ChatGPT was used as a brainstorming and development tool during production.

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Hi everyone!

I'm a new manga creator and this is the first page of my original series, MADHOUSE PRISON.

The story takes place in a supernatural prison built on a remote volcanic island that houses dragons, vampires, demons, lycanthropes, witches, and other dangerous inmates.

This page is the opening of Chapter 1.

I'd love feedback on:

• Story presentation
• Panel flow
• Character design
• Worldbuilding

Thanks for taking a look!

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Original story and characters by me. AI-assisted artwork. ChatGPT was used as a brainstorming tool during development.