Polished First Untitled Draft - 12 pages / Begginer.
Hey there I'm a pretty new writer to the game. I would call myself a visual person like I can kind of see what I want to film and how I want to film it while doing these, and I do like cinematography and a good movie. Some examples of my favourite dialogues are Billy Wilder's The Apartment, David Lynch's Blue Velvet Mulholland Drive and other movies as such, I really liked Obsession recently and Backrooms (I prefered Obsession but Backrooms is more Lynchian and existential but thats not what Im talking about hehe) because I saw young people actually out there doing their own thing.
I'm aiming to become a Director Screenwriter as I would love to give someone the same sensation I got when watching some of my favourite pieces so yeah. I would love, if for these first 12 pages you could all give me some feedback and advice.
I am not gonna lie and say I didnt try me best, because I want to be realisitc and know how good Im doing even if Im giving it my all. These 12 pages were cut short from 16 other ones, the genre is Horror and literally where I left it, is where I introduce the major event that will move the story and characters till the end.
Looking forward to hearing different opinions and see how I can improve.