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My critiques:

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Thanks for taking the time to read! This is my first time writing a novel and I'd love some feedback on the first chapter.

Visitors follows Claire, a Korean-American woman navigating her struggles with OCD and relationship trauma in the wake of a new relationship. Claire works as a pastry chef in NYC, which serves as a backdrop for her (sometimes unstable) psychological states.

[NSFW]: flashbacks of relationship trauma, physical intimacy (not smutty, but mostly used nsfw to be on the safe side)

Visitors: Chapter 1

Asking for brutal honesty:

Was there a point at which you felt the story lagged or you became less than excited about finding out what was going to happen next? Where, exactly?
Thoughts on the characters?
What were some strong points you connected with?
Would you continue reading past the first chapter if you picked this up at a book store?

[2700] Visitors [NSFW] Literary Fiction: A story of trauma and desire set in NYC's fine dining world