u/UECreed007

So… this is my first attempt at writing action. It is a fantasy setting based on a video game made by fans. Bonus points if you recognize the characters. I’m just looking for critique (what works and what would work better). Thank you in advance.

Just wanted to point this out to anyone who hasn’t heard about it. It’s very well done, the Chujin tapes especially. Absolute Cinema. Check it out!

https://youtu.be/LdHW93CZ0lg?si=Xj952evlNjVbAE6p