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Hello! I'm a rising senior this year, and I was working on reviewing my Common App essay. I was just wondering if anyone could review my essay. It's only the early version, so it may be a bit bad. I tend to write in a stream of consciousness, but I have been finding a lot of conflicting advice on social media, so I was wondering if anyone could review it and give me some feedback.

Hello! I recently wrote my Common App essay, but I'm not sure if it fits the prompt or what they're looking for. I read some online, and they seemed to be more introspective. I'm a first-generation student, and my parents can't help me. Could someone read my first draft and give me feedback? For reference I am applying as a biology major on a Pre-Med track.