u/Wolframquest

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Crit: [3250][2234][1113]

Tags: Phenomenological, experimental, coming-of-age, picaresque

Very brief and possibly incorrect recap of the story up to now:

Chapter 1 - You wakes up in the forest, enjoys his existence, follows the river to a road, gets helped by a trucker and taken to a local small town

Chapter 2 - You goes and walks around and comes across the local store and receives a name from the store owner (Henry) during his episode.

Chapter 3 - A taste of work and interacting with Henry who tries his hardest to turn Marco into a valuable worker.

Chapter 4 - Zita, coffee and gym, coming across some of Henry's friends

Chapter 5 - picaresque adventure on a quest for wet goods (meat and vegetables); encounter with Zita, discussion of Marco's issue as perceived from the outside

Chapter 6 - Marco's self reflective episode as he strays from Henry's store, wanders the woods, cooks meat and fights and gets chased by a band of dogs up to a barn roof. A rather unique form of transport arrives and scares away the dogs, offers Marco a ride.

Chapter 7 - this one, starting within the tractor.

If you've read this post body this part will make a good enough amount of sense.

The story is told in a phenomenological second person point of view.

You can find some of the previous posts here:
HSH[1][2][3] Marco RW4[1][2][3][4][5][6]

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Crits: [3250][2234]

Tags: Phenomenological, experimental, coming-of-age, picaresque

I deleted some of the previous posts to avoid creating clutter. But you can find them here if you want to read other comments HSH[1][2][3] RW4[1][2][3][4][5][6]

Very brief and possible incorrect recap of previous chapters up to now with some spoilers:

Chapter 1 - You wakes up in the forest, enjoys his existence, follows the river to a road, gets helped by a trucker and taken to a local small town

Chapter 2 - You goes and walks around and comes across the local store and receives a name from the store owner (Henry) during his episode.

Chapter 3 - Marco's experience of working with Henry and Henry's specific management and motivation methods amidst Henry's struggle of getting used to a new employee.

Chapter 4 - Marco meets a local girl Zita who seems to have some business with Henry. >!Henry and Marco enjoy and experience a unique kind of coffee and Henry reveals a basement gym under the store he's been working on. Marco and Henry work out together and Marco saves Henry on bench press and Henry, in return, naturally aids Marco in developing an efficient training method without explicit coaching.!< Next morning, Marco encounters government officials and Henry's old friend.

Chapter 5 - Henry tasks Marco with purchasing groceries. Marco travels to a gas station mart where he has a discussion with local kids on the nature of some of the local cryptids. In the store he encounters Zita.>!She has a discussion with him about his condition and tries to help him in her own way.!<

Chapter 6 - Instead of going straight back to Henry, >!Marco finds himself sitting on top a hill and THINKING if he wants to come back to Henry. Why is it under a spoiler?!< Marco then explores the locale and gets attacked and chased by a pack of dogs up onto a roof of a barn and ponders some facts of his short life. >!The dogs get chased away when a peculiar machine arrives.!<

Chapter 7 - this one. It'll be in three parts. Today it's the first part. It does require some knowledge of the previous book, but if you don't have it it matters significantly less than the beginning of chapter 6.

I'd like you to read this part (if you want to and you think you're caught up) and share some memories of your experience reading it, in this specific order.

ALSO I'd gladly accept reviews and critiques of other parts 😀 I've actually been doing a bunch of minor edits of chapter 3 and the start of chapter 4 😉

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Crit: [2900]

Tags: Phenomenological, experimental, coming-of-age, picaresque

I deleted some of the previous posts to avoid creating clutter. But you can find them here if you want to read other comments HSH[1][2][3] RW4[1][2][3][4][5]

Barebone recap of the previous chapters:

Chapter 1 - You wakes up in the forest, enjoys his existence, follows the river to a road, gets helped by a trucker and taken to a local small town

Chapter 2 - You goes and walks around and comes across the local store and receives a name from the store owner (Henry) during his episode.

Chapter 3 - A taste of work and interacting with Henry who tries his hardest to turn Marco into a valuable worker.

Chapter 4 - Zita, coffee and gym

Chapter 5 - picaresque adventure on a quest for wet goods (meat and vegetables); encounter with Zita, discussion of Marco's issue as perceived from the outside

Chapter 6 - this one, it'll be delivered in two separate posts cause that works better for engagement and creates fewer problems with mods and credit and so on.

This chapter is sort of a crux of Marco as a person and it won't make a lot of sense without you having read the previous chapters but I welcome you regardless - I enjoy my time inside of your brain.

The genres and the "phenomenological" tag I enjoyed formerly are false and can only be used descriptively. Phenomenology is only a method, not the point. It is, however, a method I enjoy for its high fidelity.

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Crits: [3319] [69] [2344]

Tags: Phenomenological, experimental, bildungsroman, picaresque

Recap of the previous chapters:

Chapter 1 - The protagonist wakes up in the forest, takes it in, feels it. His reaction to his state of being can reveal to us a thing or two - about him or ourselves. Helped by friendly local, he arrives to Pleasantview, a tiny town in the woods.

Chapter 2 - The protagonist meets Henry in the local store and comes upon a name Marco and a place to live and work - at least for a while. Some things change, evolve, adapt - it's obvious but not prominent.

Chapter 3 - Marco gets a taste of real work and having a man for a boss. Distractions of entertainment emerge and take up some of his focus, demanding him to struggle with and against authority.
This chapter ends on a new day and a recollection of meeting someone new.

Chapter 4 - this one. Things change, much like terrain changes in winter! There's still ground under the ice but that doesn't mean you should wear sandals.
This chapter starts with Marco manning the front counter, as usual.

Essay for the regulars:

You always have to manage expectations, don't you? Sometimes you have to dig deeper when a person you expected to leave one kind of a review leaves something completely different, unsettling - whether positive or negative. You wouldn't wanna buy opera tickets and end up on a nature hike & downriver mountain rafting, right? Or maybe you do enjoy a little surprise from time to time, treat your life like one big gamble. You keep betting on zero because of how stubborn you are and you never realize that your chances to win don't actually go up with every loss. But still, you do not want to chose between black or red - they both seem like evils to you, nevermind which one is lesser.

I hope you remember what happened in earlier chapters, and if not you can just read them again 😀 Just don't tell me you skimmed anything 😁

Here's the confession - we're not looking for critics, none of us are. We're looking for readers. The hyrax chews himself a hole in the mountain, even if it is a small, humble animal. I wanna chew a hole in your brain, in your soul - where a part of me will forever reside, connected through the world of ideas. I'll think of you and you will feel something. Because you now have a memory of what it was like to touch someone else's soul - the rarest kind of intimacy that can only happen between truly loving people or absolute strangers.