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Hi, I wrote a speculative sci-fi short story about a civilization that survives the collapse of Mars, destabilizes Venus trying to survive, and ultimately chooses not to colonize Earth.

The story is more atmospheric/philosophical than action-focused. It deals with themes like deep time, planetary change, civilizational inertia, survival, and informational decay.

I’d especially appreciate feedback on:

- pacing/readability

- scientific plausibility

- prose/style

- whether the emotional arc lands

- sections that feel too dense or repetitive

It’s around 3.6k words, so a somewhat longer read.

Google Doc: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1N4TTMIl02RmueuLPF8s5-\_cT9IpgD0zsHyvcyqmnz\_M/edit?usp=drivesdk