u/alexsearha

Balek

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Hi everyone!

REMINDER : For those who didn't see my previous post, this piece tells the story of a soldier during the Siege of Paris in the Franco-Prussian War of 1870–1871.

The excerpt is divided into five main phases:

• Phase 1 (00:00 => 00:40): the soldier's unit launches an assault against the enemy.
• Phase 2 (00:40 => 00:51): an artillery shell lands in the middle of the unit, killing the captain and wounding several soldiers.
• Phase 3 (00:51 => 01:10) : realizing they are about to be surrounded, the surviving soldiers are forced to retreat in an attempt to escape the encirclement.
• Phase 4 (01:10 => 01:21): sailors capture several insurgents and are about to execute them. The protagonist opposes their execution and intervenes to prevent them from being killed.
• Phase 5 (01:21 => to the end): fresh troops arrive to relieve the exhausted soldiers. As they make their way along Paris, the protagonist observes the sleeping city. He remarks that its inhabitants are sleeping peacefully, unaware of how difficult the night has been for those fighting only a few miles away.

I'd really appreciate some constructive feedback on the piece as a whole, especially regarding its overall coherence and how well the music supports the different phases of the story.

I'd be particularly interested to know if you notice any orchestration issues, awkward transitions, moments that feel unnatural or disconnected, or anything else that stands out to you as something that could be improved.

I'm mainly looking for honest and constructive criticism, so please don't hesitate to point out anything you think doesn't work or could be done better. I'm still learning orchestration and composition, so detailed feedback is very welcome.

Thanks again for taking the time to listen!

Ca va jusqu'au fin fond de la loire 🤷🏻‍♂️🤦🏻‍♂️

Hi everyone!

REMINDER : For those who didn't see my previous post, this piece tells the story of a soldier during the Siege of Paris in the Franco-Prussian War of 1870–1871.

The excerpt is divided into three main phases:

• Phase 1: the soldier's unit launches an assault against the enemy.
• Phase 2: an artillery shell lands in the middle of the unit, killing the captain and wounding several soldiers.
• Phase 3 (not composed yet): realizing they are about to be surrounded, the surviving soldiers are forced to retreat in an attempt to escape the encirclement.

I'd love to hear your thoughts on how well the music conveys these different moments and whether the transitions between them feel convincing.

I took your feedback into account and made several improvements to the piece. I also composed the next section, so the excerpt is now a bit longer than before.

I tried to make the descending chromatic run feel more natural by improving the transition into it, and I reworked a few orchestration details along the way.

I'd really appreciate hearing your thoughts again. Does the transition work better now? Does the new section feel like a natural continuation? And more generally, is there anything that still stands out as awkward or could be improved?

Thanks again for taking the time to listen and for all the helpful feedback!

I'm currently working on a new composition. It's about a soldier during the Siege of Paris in the Franco-Prussian War of 1870–1871, on the battlefield.

I added a descending chromatic run to represent the bombs whistling around the soldier, but I'm wondering if it feels like it comes out of nowhere. Do you think I should introduce the woodwinds a bit earlier to make the transition feel more natural, or am I just overthinking it?

Hi everyone,

I've been composing music for many years, mostly in the rock and metal world. While that gave me a solid practical background, I never had a formal education in music theory or composition.

Since over twinyears, I've started learning music theory, harmony, score reading, and orchestration seriously. My goal is to catch up on everything I missed and build a strong foundation as a composer.

My biggest inspirations are composers like John Williams, Howard Shore, Elliot Goldenthal, Danny Elfman , jeremy soule, and many others from the world of orchestral and film music. I'm fascinated by orchestration, thematic writing, harmony, and musical storytelling, and I spend a lot of time studying scores and trying to understand how great composers think.

I feel like I've reached the point where learning entirely on my own is becoming difficult. I'd love to connect with composers who are further along than I am and who would be willing to help guide my progress.

I'm not looking for free lessons or a full-time teacher. Even occasional guidance would mean a lot.

For example, if anyone would be willing to:

point out weaknesses in my compositions,

suggest what I should study next,

give me composition or orchestration exercises,

challenge me with small writing assignments,

review my progress from time to time,

or even collaborate on music for fun,

I'd be incredibly grateful.

Even if you don't have the time to mentor someone, I'd really appreciate advice on a good learning roadmap. What skills should I focus on first? In what order would you study harmony, counterpoint, orchestration, form, and composition if you had to start over?

My goal is simply to become the best composer I can be. I'm ready to put in the work

I just feel that having guidance from more experienced composers would help me progress much faster.

If this resonates with you, I'd love to hear from you. Feel free to comment or send me a DM.

Here is one of my composition :

https://youtu.be/GxbvnYUR7e4

Thanks for reading!