u/haydeswch

this is a rough work of a short collaborative story, please roughly criticize me

it's about a suicidal man collecting back his memories and becoming schizophrenic yeah.

work: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Ygu2xoGPBeMxqmsjvoy2ES4vQXapkjoYjq3K09EgY3c/edit?usp=drivesdk

crit: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/s/5aLE8yMfCn