u/jessgenao

Hi,
So I’ve been receiving really good feedback on my script and I’m honestly just shocked. I think for me, I knew the story for me was good which led me to think I was biased (obviously since it’s my own work) but it’s just shocking to me that it’s really getting good feedback and that the things I need to fix are mostly grammar and technicalities which isn’t bad because it doesn’t have much to do with needing to change my story at all.

I guess my question is when responding to feedback being that this is my first script and I’m still new to learning everything there is, how do you avoid sounding too emotional when responding back to the feedback? I’m extremely grateful for the feedback I’m receiving but, I feel like maybe I can sound overly emotional when simply giving thanks. I don’t think it’s too much of an issue but just curious as I know not everyone would be receptive to things like that?

Not entirely sure if that made sense or if maybe that’s happened to anyone else? Sorry if it’s dumb but just a bit overwhelmed (in a good way) with the feedback I’ve been receiving and just wanted to ask.

Title: Madre, Solo Una (Mother, Only One)

Format: Feature

Page length: 90

Genre: Drama, Family Drama

Logline: A Dominican mother starts therapy for the first time to convince herself that her kids are the reason why they won't communicate with her but discovers there's more under the surface.

Feedback Concerns: while I think I did a great job with my characters & think it’s on the right track for what I want, I feel I can go deeper with my main character, Mami. I think maybe I delve too much into the relationship between her and her daughter. I would like to just see where this stands as far as general feedback goes because aside from family who doesn’t really read scripts, I’d like to know what you think. I think it’s a solid ish first draft but, I could be biased because it’s my own work. And I don’t know how I feel about my ending yet. While the story is the same in the sense that my ending is going to be a birthday party, I think I have a very sort of flat ending when my main idea is to focus on the question when was the last time you really felt seen. So my ending is supposed to be sort of unresolved in the sense that there’s this split moment where the mother feels seen, I just don’t think I executed that correctly.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1A-x\_HoBNJcWyZ8nrmPLHPcmgFzCgjF4f/view?usp=drivesdk

Title: Madre, Solo Una (Mother, Only One)

Format: Feature

Page length: 90

Genre: Drama, Family Drama

Logline: A Dominican mother starts therapy for the first time to convince herself that her kids are the reason why they won't communicate with her but discovers there's more under the surface.

Feedback Concerns: while I think I did a great job with my characters & think it’s on the right track for what I want, I feel I can go deeper with my main character, Mami. I think maybe I delve too much into the relationship between her and her daughter. I would like to just see where this stands as far as general feedback goes because aside from family who doesn’t really read scripts, I’d like to know what you think. I think it’s a solid ish first draft but, I could be biased because it’s my own work. And I don’t know how I feel about my ending yet. While the story is the same in the sense that my ending is going to be a birthday party, I think I have a very sort of flat ending when my main idea is to focus on the question when was the last time you really felt seen. So my ending is supposed to be sort of unresolved in the sense that there’s this split moment where the mother feels seen, I just don’t think I executed that correctly.

Sorry if I rambled, this is my first time sharing here so brutal honesty would be greatly appreciated simply so I can learn and honestly just update as I go. I’d like to apply to different labs but, just want to see where this is right now.