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Crit: 1646

Story

This one is a little frame story.

Many thanks in advance!

Crits: 1444 1384 1571 1000 (This last one is more of a comment, not sure it counts. Consider it a cherry.)

This is the second chapter of a satirical SF novelette (the first waystop). Stylistically, I'm aiming for Don Quijote x Hitchhiker's Guide.

I put a summary of the first chapter at the beginning of the doc (counted in the WC).

Does it make sense? Does the humor land? Prose: any good?

Story: 3160

Much obliged.

Crits: 1400 2613

This is the first chapter of a novelette. While not my original intent, it's best described as Don Quijote x Hitchhiker's Guide. The rest of the story is about this hitchhiker encountering various deranged hermits along an interstellar highway.

Mainly, I want to know if the humor lands and if it piques your interest. Otherwise, do your thing, tear it up.

My story: 1129

Many thanks in advance!

Note to mods: I originally used the two critiques for a post that got no response (bar an AI "feedback", which was removed). After reflecting on that post and the lack of response, I deleted it and ruminated some more on my life choices. Anyway, I hope it's alright to "reuse" the crits.