u/striker7

My crit: Mad Magnolia [2052]

I wrote the first draft of this probably five years ago and decided to dust it off and see where it goes. This is the first chapter of a lit fic novel and it is intended to do a few things:

• Introduce the reader to the main character and give a vague sense of him
• Drop him right into an environment that relates one of the underlying themes of the book (climate change, which is part of the greater theme, the folly of man Edit but none of that is important or apparent yet; just explaining why this standalone scene will make more sense in the broader view)
• Hook the reader into continuing to chapter 2

But I don't know if I'll keep it because anyone banking on point #3 will be disappointed; chapter 2 picks up a few days later and across the country, so there may or may not be satisfaction for what happens in chapter 1. There will be quite a slowdown after this, but more action to come.

Anyway, as with any first chapter, the main thing I want to know is whether you liked it enough to keep reading, but I'm curious to hear all of your thoughts and feedback.

PS. It's a working title, but points to you if you know the reference

A Most Pernicious Race - Chapter 1