Is this line making sense?
I made a song. this line is from the lyrics. Could you let me know if it makes sense, please?
മാമധുരമാ ഋതു തോറ്റുപോകുമാം
എന്റെ നെഞ്ചിലെ കോപ്പയിൽ സേമിയ പായസം
I am not looking for feedback on the creative writing part. Just tell me please if it makes sense grammatically.
That sweetest of seasons would pale in comparison
to the "semiya payasam" in the bowl held against my heart
- this is what I meant