Looking for feedback on my shonen-style story (need honest critique)
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Hi. I’m a writer working on a story I’d eventually like to turn into a manga.
Before I invest time into artwork, I want to know if the story itself is actually interesting to other people, not just me.
It’s a shonen-style action story focused on:
high-level battles and evolving abilities
an intelligent, adaptive main antagonist and protagonist
a power system based on resources and strategy (not just strength)
The story is currently written as prose/chapters (no manga script or art yet). If you’re interested, I can share:
the opening chapter, or
a short excerpt (5–10 minutes read), or
a summary first if you prefer
I’d really appreciate honest feedback, especially on:
whether the premise is interesting
pacing and clarity
character appeal
whether you’d continue reading
Thanks for your time.