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Looking for feedback on my first grounded first-contact sci-fi serial (7 Chapters)
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Looking for feedback on my first grounded first-contact sci-fi serial (7 Chapters)

Hi everyone,

I've just finished publishing the first seven chapters of my first science fiction serial on Royal Road.

The premise is:

Humanity's last normal day ended when the ships appeared.

Above every major city on Earth, colossal alien vessels emerged from the clouds and brought civilization to a standstill. Governments panicked. Religions declared prophecies fulfilled. Markets crashed.

Then every screen on Earth displayed the same message:

"We are not your enemy."

For thousands of years, Earth had been hidden from the rest of the galaxy.

Now it has been found.

As humanity is drawn into a conflict older than recorded history, Vivek—a young engineer carrying the scars of a troubled childhood—finds himself caught between forces that see Earth not as a world, but as a choice.

A choice between freedom and unity.

A choice between survival and identity.

A choice that may decide the future of intelligent life itself.

The Day We Were Found is a science-fiction thriller about first contact, hidden truths, family, sacrifice, and what it truly means to remain human.

They reveal that Earth has remained hidden for thousands of years... until now.

I'm mainly looking for honest feedback.

  • Does the opening hook you?
  • Is the pacing working?
  • Would you continue after Chapter 1?

I'm trying to improve as a writer, so I'd genuinely appreciate constructive criticism.

Royal Road: https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/174488/the-day-we-were-found

u/Certain-Window-6749 — 11 days ago

New story up

<<deep breath>>

I tried this self-promotion thing on a different page and got shamed for not giving the right (?) information. Yeah, that post got deleted. Going to give it another try.

I just posted up the latest in my Battle of the Planets/Gatchaman inspired series.

Knowledge of the series is not necessary. In fact, it would probably disappoint most Gatch fan since I did a total reimage.

The tagging thing in AO3 still baffles me, so I'll just go with the summary instead. It is a Gen, family story.

-Through the Valley-

Sometimes the hardest battles aren't fought on the battlefield. They're fought at home, surrounded by the people who refuse to let you give up.

After tragedy forces Kris and Paul into retirement, the Kimpel family is determined to move forward one day at a time. As she helps her family navigate toddlers, service dogs, physical therapy, lingering grief, and the offer of a revolutionary medical treatment, Jaya is learning that healing isn't a destination. Some battles can only be won when the family comes together.

https://archiveofourown.org/works/88611001/chapters/235095216

If by chance you find it interesting, the rest of the series is also there. The series goes back about 20 years.

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u/wyldkat_ — 9 days ago