u/8thGradeDeathpact

hi, guys! I am trying to create a flawed character that you can still root for and I want tobszill make them a good person! tell me what you think or if there is anything that needs changing

she is 14 yrs old

started swearing at 11 after her mom died

stooped swearing until 13

occasionally skipped gym due to anxiety

forgot to complete community service hours but eventually did them just late

always feels guilty over everything

struggles to focus

feels like an outcasts who doenst fit anywhere

always wondering if her friends are bad influences then feels guilty cause she thinks it makes her look narcissistic

gets angry easily

very polite

kind genourpus and some would say intelligent

anyway tell me your thoughts and anything I can add to make this a more compelling character

this story idea would basically be about these 5 girls living in the woods together as a found family.

then one day they are visiting the market in town, when one of them gets recognized by her abusive father who she was separated from 3 years prior, and he takes her and drugs her, which causes the other 4 girls to think she went willingly because they didn’t see her fight back.

so the girl who was taken away pretends to be in love with a servant to help her escape, because her father is an abuser, and her real siblings alienate her.

well back in the forest one of the girls is going into town and meeting with the same servant shown she has a crush on, and they even do kiss.

Then eventually the main girl escapes, and reveals she only thought of the servant as a friend.

then she is one her own and finds her found family in the woods and they reunite.

would you be interested in reading a story like This?