Timberline - TV Episode 1 - 60 Pages
Saw the feedback from the last time, here's a revised version, again any feedback is appreciated.
Title: Timberline Chapter. I December 19, 2003
Format: Series
Page Length: 60 Pages
Genre: Drama/Mystery
Logline: In the quiet mountain town of Timberline, Wyoming, the disappearance of a local rancher's cow sets off a chain of strange events that slowly unravel the lives of those searching for the truth.
It's an intentionally character-driven, slow-burn mystery, I'm looking for feedback on pacing, dialogue, character introductions, and whether the mystery is compelling enough to make you want to read Chapter. II
LINK: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1BmAYkucQdcUfNM7YOyfrxA5OYFJsVzg9/view?usp=sharing
u/AdventurousWonder479 — 2 hours ago