r/ReadMyScript

-Perpetual Disaster

:Format- Short Script

:Pages -8

:Final draft

:Genres-pitch black/ dark comedy/ drama

Logline -

pathologically anxious young man’s attempt to survive a vegan dinner with his girlfriend’s uptight parents spirals into a grotesque, sewage-soaked nightmare. And spirals from a catastrophe into a tragedy that doesn't relent untill the last cut.

(I kept out the cover page out of fear of breaking the self promo rules)

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ZR3EQ3MbKLlF_ecLECDkPAZldic2Sf7-/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey everyone, I hope you're all good!

I wrote a Resident Evil movie script that adapts the 1996 game, but as a working, production-ready screenplay. I love the original 1996 game, but I've always been frustrated by how Hollywood turns the franchise into a superhero action fest. So, I wrote a feature length script to prove you can adapt the original lore into an airtight, terrifying, 90-minute survival horror movie. Think Dawn of the Dead meets Aliens. It follows the classic lineup (Chris, Jill, Barry, Rebecca, Wesker) trapped in the Spencer Mansion, but I wanted to make sure it runs like a realistic cinematic experience.

Since the main sub doesn't allow external links, I can't post the script directly here. But I’d love to share it with fellow RE fans! You can find it on my profile page or at r / residentevilscript

Here's a little sample below.

Thank you so much!

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ACT 1 - SCENE 3

EXT. ARKLAY MOUNTAINS - CLEARING - NIGHT

The rain has stopped now. The CHOPPER hovers low, its searchlight cutting through the mist like a laser beam. The trees bend under the force of the CHOPPER’S rotors

BRAD (INTERCOM)

I see smoke! Three o’clock! Down in that clearing!

The searchlight hits a patch of wreckage. It’s the BRAVO TEAM CHOPPER.

INT. HELICOPTER - CONTINUOUS

WESKER

Put us down. Now!

EXT. ARKLAY FOREST - CONTINUOUS

The Alpha Team hits the ground before the skids even touch the mud. CHRIS, JILL, BARRY, JOSEPH and WESKER move out in a 360-degree security perimeter.

The silence after the roar of the engine is deafening.

CHRIS

Bravo! It’s Alpha!

No response.

BARRY examines the cockpit of the CRASHED CHOPPER. He finds KEVIN DOOLEY (Bravo team).

BARRY

Captain. It’s Dooley. He’s... This wasn’t the crash. It’s... Something got into the cockpit?

JOSEPH is twenty yards out, his flashlight beam dancing over the tall grass. He spots something metallic reflecting in the weeds.

JOSEPH

Hey! I’ve got something!

JOSEPH holsters his weapon and jogs towards whatever he’s spotted. The rest of the team turns their heads.

JILL

Joseph, wait! Stay with the team!

JOSEPH reaches down and grabs a handgun from the undergrowth. He tugs. The gun doesn’t come free.

He pulls harder. A SEVERED ARM, still clad in a Bravo Team sleeve, rips out of the brush. It’s jagged at the shoulder. Raw bone and sinew.

JOSEPH

(Gasping)

Oh god...

GROWL.

A guttural vibration seems to come from the earth itself.

JOSEPH freezes. He slowly turns his head to his left.

Two yellow eyes ignite in the darkness. Then four. Then six.

He looks to the right. Another four pairs.

They don’t blink. They’re moving closer. Slowly moving into position.

JOSEPH

(Stepping backwards, voice cracking)

Oh no. No no no!

Before he can bring his weapon up, a CERBERUS (zombie doberman) leaps from the darkness, its skin peeling off in wet ribbons.

CRUNCH!

It latches onto Joseph’s throat with a sickening snap.

JILL

JOSEPH!

The clearing explodes.

BAP! BAP! BAP! BOOM! PFT! PFT!

The team opens fire, but the dogs are fast, blurring like shadows. JOSEPH is dragged into the darkness, screaming as his flashlight spirals into the undergrowth before going dark.

WESKER

Fall back! Everyone back in the chopper!

They turn and look up. The CHOPPER is already airborne.

The Huey is thirty feet in the air, tilting away.

We see BRAD’S terrified face through the glass as he points and screams something inaudible before peeling out over the treeline.

BARRY

BRAD! YOU COWARD! GET BACK HERE!

A CERBERUS leaps at CHRIS and JILL.

PFT! PFT!

WESKER shoots it mid-air, knocking it off course.

WESKER

MOVE!

The team turns and runs. They fire at the dogs chasing them but it’s no use. They’re not putting them down, and they’re not outrunning them.

Chris stops running, turns, and aims.

CHRIS

QUICK! RUN! I’LL COVER YOU!

He spots one CERBERUS coming in low. He fires, dropping it with a headshot.

He keeps firing into THE PACK.

Another CERBERUS hits him from the side. They both vanish into the darkness.

No one sees.

JILL, BARRY, and WESKER keep running.

Through the fog, the massive, monolithic silhouette of the SPENCER MANSION looms.

A flash of lightning illuminates it.

For a split second, it looks less like a house, and more like a mausoleum.

WESKER

GO! NOW! RUN FOR THAT HOUSE!

JILL, BARRY, and WESKER keep running. Behind them, the sounds of snapping jaws and heavy paws are gaining.

They scramble up the stone steps of the porch. JILL and BARRY hit the massive oak doors first.

BARRY

OPEN UP! God damn it! OPEN THE DOORS!

WESKER isn’t far behind. He grabs the handle and slams his shoulder into the doors. They give way. The trio tumbles inside.

WESKER slams the doors shut and drops the barricade.

Silence.

• Title: In A Perfect World
• Format: Feature
• Page Length: 3
• Genres: Drama
• Logline: A nihilist who believes the human existence is meaningless is forced to survive out on his own after an economic apocalypse which leaves everyone to fend for themselves and no law enforcement
• Feedback Concerns: Only sharing the first 3 pages for now, but I need feedback on how to maybe improve this. It's my first true screenplay and spec script that I'm actively working on and I want to know if I'm doing this right or not

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1zkOF8EHDhPaQovK-cb3msT6m84zM2d78/view?usp=sharing

I had posted this yesterday but due to thread editing errors amongst other things, I deleted the post. I'm back, hopefully with no typos this time!

Title: Cannonball
Format: Short
Length: 9 pages
Genres: Psychological Horror, Dark Comedy

Logline: After crashing his car while dictating a breakup through a voice assistant, a self-absorbed young man stumbles into a late-night pool party where the beautiful, hollow strangers turn out to be far better at using people than he'll ever be.

Feedback Concerns: This is the first thing I had ever written, and first time I'm ever seeking feedback. I came back to it after finishing two scripts (including the feature that this is the cold open for) and polished it up. I have an opportunity to share it with someone who might be able to give me guidance and help me make this short. I just need an honest assessment of: my voice/habits and the short in general.

I don't want to share this with someone who may be able to open doors for me until it's technically sound and cohesive. The only people who have read my works are friends. Of course they like it, lol. I have no idea where I stand.

Thank you to anyone who assists, it's truly so appreciated.

Google drive PDF link

Title: Something to say

Pages: 5

Genre: Comedy / Animation

LOGLINE:

A dog lover’s quiet night at home takes a bizarre turn after he wakes to an unexpected confrontation.

I usually go for horror, thriller, and action, but I’m trying out comedy for the first time to broaden my horizons.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1blhQVK2jcMr7nnP6fDQX4z6RM8bO-IvJ/view?usp=sharing

I hope you enjoy.

And of course, thank you for reading.

So i'm in the process of writing my first script, basically a synopsis of it is "A nihilist who believes the human existence is meaningless is forced to survive out on his own after a global economic apocalypse which leaves everyone to fend for themselves and no law enforcement"

I've just finished the opening scene and i was wondering if i could get some opinions on it and maybe some changes i need to make

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1kDee21hkUW3r3Q9aTGAXUowFNL2LsMl4/view?usp=sharing

1 page

Hi everyone,

I just finished my first feature film script called Falling for Delilah. I used Studiobinder to format, so please ignore the scene numbers. Just learning the ropes (of formatting).

Logline: A disciplined college freshman falls for a beautiful, emotionally complicated girl who slowly becomes the greatest temptation of his life.

Any feedback is appreciated. I love constructive criticism!

Script: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1OONPSh6xGKWRqqW7Cu1j95fSHXLkQUZI/view?usp=drive_link

It’s short it’s my first and I have a long list like 43 other various size projects, also am I doing this right? Thanks

Logline: A petty convenience store theft turns fatal when time violently fractures, forcing a thief to witness a tragedy in reverse before reality snaps forward.

Pages: 2

Genre: Psychological Crime Thriller

Link to scrip: https://www.dropbox.com/scl/fi/1jauxjvaehbijytphqg20/Out-of-Time-A.pdf?rlkey=evemkt368sd7e7m5ajgx7cw78&st=1fvh62on&dl=0

Hey everyone, looking for feedback on this short scene introducing a sudden time-reversal mechanic during a robbery. Let me know what you think of the pacing and the imagery.

The Disconnect

When Kratos dropped his signature Spartan rage to preach about "doing better" in the newer games, a massive portion of the fanbase felt a severe disconnect. It sounded preachy, forced, and entirely out of place for a hardened, ancient warrior—like a modern politician politicking to appeal to contemporary crowds.

But what if it wasn't soft corporate writing? What if every piece of moral dialogue in the Norse saga was actually part of a high-stakes, multi-millennial tactical stealth operation?

By re-architecting the God of War lore using pure internal "hardware logic," we can bridge the raw gravity of the Greek era with the emotional weight of the Norse reboot. This is the official 9-board narrative blueprint for God of War: Ófriðr Níu (The War of the Nine).

Part I: The Primordial System Architecture

1. The Babel Shattering & The Planetary Order

Long before the gods existed, a unified primordial civilization built a supreme cosmic artifact—The Mask—to defy the True Higher Realm Gods. To punish their hubris, those Higher Gods violently shattered the mask. That cosmic explosion fractured existence, splitting reality into separate, isolated pockets.

In this sector, the shattering of the mask is what physically generated the Nine Realms. Each realm became a literal physical shard of a broken infinity. To prevent an explosive elemental hardware rejection, the universe decreed that the fragments could only ever be reassembled in a strict, unyielding planetary orbital sequence: M-V-E-M-J-S-U-N-P (Mercury, Venus, Earth, Mars, Jupiter, Saturn, Uranus, Neptune, Pluto).

2. The Law of Incomplete Disaster

The intentional, attempted use of the incomplete mask or individual shards results in absolute disaster. Siphoning power from a standalone shard triggers a violent cosmic feedback loop. The keepers only want to protect and contain the pieces, leaving them stable. Odin wants to actively use them, meaning any attempt to wield his pieces violently backfires, frying his surroundings and accelerating his mental decay.

3. Odin's HDD Brain (The Cognitive Curse)

Odin struck a forbidden deal with the True Higher Realm Gods to look into the rift and glimpse the pre-shattered reality. As the literal collateral for this transaction, Odin sacrificed his own eye.

However, the Higher Gods programmed a devastating cognitive curse into the rift: the infinite data immediately began to operate like a fading, waking dream. The experience inflicted a creeping cosmic dementia upon the All-Father, turning his brain into a severely fragmented organic **Hard Disk Drive (HDD)**suffering from massive data corruption, bad sectors, and severe Server Latency whenever his focus wanders too far from center.

4. The 9-Raven Drone Grid

To run a brute-force hack on his rotting brain, Odin built an automated cloud network: flocks of 9 Ravens. To reveal a hidden shard, the universe requires a hyper-specific 9-part Harmonic Chant operating on a mathematical circular shift cipher. If a shard is in Realm 2, the chant sequence must start in Realm 2's native tongue and cycle down the line (2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 1).

Because Odin's brain can no longer calculate these shifts on the fly, he programs his 9-bird processing clusters to deploy across the realms. Each bird carries exactly one permutation of the chant. They land on physical landmarks—like monuments and statues—and simultaneously broadcast all 9 permutations. If the location doesn't match their sequence, the system returns a 404 error, and the drones move on.

Part II: The Historical Conflict (Ófriðr Níu)

5. The Scrambled Coordinate Matrix & The Convergence Ambush

For generations, the secret global sects run the Millennial Shard Exchange, physically rotating the fragments between realms to foster a continued commitment to the alliance and keep the combination scrambled. Because of this, planetary attributes no longer match their geographical realms; Shard **P (Pluto)**may very well be physically hidden inside the native coordinates of Realm E (Earth/Midgard).

A rogue Giant defector leaks the coordinates of the upcoming Realm Convergence Point to Asgard. Odin, completely empty-handed but blinded by the prospect of infinite power, deploys the full military might of Asgard to ambush the secret global sects during their scheduled shard rotation ceremony. The peaceful ritual instantly devolves into a chaotic bloodbath.

Odin successfully seizes 3 physical fragments during the slaughter. To protect the rest, the alliance collapses into an emergency upload:

• Faye intentionally dissolves and absorbs her designated shard into her Jötunn soul structure.
• Týr, previously injured during the fight, grabs an active shard and places it in his clothes for transport. Due to his godly blood mixing with his open wounds, a violent reaction occurs, absorbing the shard directly into his veins.
• The remaining shards are successfully snatched up and whisked away by the surviving Egyptian and Japanese protectors, vanishing back into the scrambled global grid.

6. The Traitor’s Bargain & The Genocidal Fuse

Odin walks away from the ambush with nothing but his original 3 pieces, completely empty-handed from the grand prize. Strung up in a bloodthirsty fury, Odin prepares to execute the informant on the spot for the failure—especially wanting to kill him because Faye is also a Giant, making the entire botched operation look like a massive, hostile Jötunn double-cross.

To save his own life, the traitor drops a massive piece of classified intelligence: the existence of the 9 Harmonic Chants. However, the traitor explicitly warns the All-Father that because of the millennial shuffling, no one alive knows the exact planetary layout of the remaining pieces. Using this info, Odin forces his Ravens to identify which 3 attributes he holds, but because he cannot use them without triggering a system explosion, they sit uselessly in his study.

Fueled by his burning paranoia of the Giant "double-cross" at the Convergence, Odin's humiliation turns into a toxic, personal vendetta. He demands the Giants turn over Faye and her internal shard. They fiercely refuse to protect the universe, prompting Odin to deploy Thor to execute a systematic hard-drive format of the Jötunn race. A devastated, surviving Faye escapes into absolute, "Kratos-style" paranoid isolation in the deepest woods of Midgard.

Part III: The Intimate Tragedies

7. General Laufey's Prime & The Path to Zen

To solve the visual immersion gap of her sleeker frame, Faye wields the Leviathan Axe, which possesses giant-magic adaptive geometry that physically scales its size and mass to match her athletic frame. Her secondary tool is the Frost-Weave Core gauntlet, which allows her to manifest upgradable, high-velocity ice blades. She uses supreme kinetic leverage and a devastating Flash-Freeze Parry to freeze enemies mid-swing and shatter them.

Meanwhile, Týr's unaligned data injection triggers terrifying, uncontrollable fits of rage. To survive, Týr is forced to drop his weapons and build a strict mental firewall of absolute, flat-lined "zen" peace. If his emotions spike, the shard will instantly detonate and erase his soul.

Faye marries Kratos—the only god whose untrackable, foreign Greek soul can act as a blind vault (having unknowingly absorbed the Greek shard when his own homeland collapsed). By breeding with him, her shard genetically transfers to Atreus. Because only females can transfer a shard, the birth breaks her immortality reactor, causing her to gradually age like a regular mortal.

8. The Monument Clash (The Maternal Burn)

Years later, a flock of 9 scanning Ravens stumbles onto their location inside an ancient, ruined Giant monument. The drones hit a live coordinate match and broadcast the local cipher, causing a catastrophic data surge to strike Atreus' mutated internal SSD. The high-frequency signal begins frying the boy's young brain.

Seeing her child in agony triggers Faye's protective maternal fury. Bypassing her body's natural safety limits, she unleashes a violent, blinding blizzard of frost magic to manually format those birds before they can beam the coordinates back to Asgard. Faye saves her son from a neural meltdown, but the massive divine footprint she leaves behind is the exact flare that allows Asgard's tracking forces to target their cabin years later. She passes away shortly after, leaving Kratos cryptic instructions to chop the marked trees.

9. The Firmware Patch & The Final Checkmate

This completely recontextualizes the entire 2018 game. Atreus' sudden sickness wasn't a psychological illusion—it was a catastrophic Firmware Incompatibility. His mortal operating system couldn't run the infinite shard firmware he inherited from his mother, triggering a total system hardware crash when his anger spiked.

When Kratos delivers his calm confession, their shared bloodline triggers a familial resonance loop. As the first familial shard bearers in history, they act as a redundant network. Kratos' newly defragmented head acts as a massive cooling mechanism, wirelessly uploading a software patch that permanently stabilizes his son. Kratos wasn't organically becoming a soft pacifist; he was being carefully re-programmed by Faye, because a calm head was the only encryption key capable of safely holding the shards.

The ultimate checkmate occurs at the rift. Odin pushes Atreus to look inside because the All-Father is terrified the Higher Gods will take his remaining eye as further toll. But nothing happens to Atreus. The cosmic curse only targets greed. Because Atreus, Faye, and Týr possess pure innocence and a total lack of desire to weaponize the mask, their minds act as a natural system firewall.

Realizing the final missing shards are the living, biological souls of himself, his father, and Týr, Atreus breaks the mask to break the combination lock forever. Faye's multi-millennial stealth operation succeeds perfectly. By forcing Kratos to "be better," she defragmented his soul, created the ultimate protector, and permanently kept the universe safely broken.

LOOKOUT

78 pages, feature

Horror, thriller

Logline - A desperate fire lookout spends his summer in a national park searching for his lost mother when he accidentally stirs the interest of a mysterious cult who make his stay of life and death.

I’ve finally gotten to a point where I’m happy with this script but I’m sure there’s still ways to improve it so any issues or even just small details that you think would improve it please let me know. Thank you so much for reading.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1RQRahPM-tbWHHLai6Ythh7LwNw3\_AHtS/view?usp=drivesdk

Hey everyone,

I’m a writer/director based in LA and I recently submitted a short film project to the Sofia Coppola x Decentralized Pictures fund.

The platform relies heavily on community reviews/feedback, and I’d genuinely love thoughts from other filmmakers rather than just asking friends to click a button.

The project leans more atmospheric/psychological/indie than commercial, so I’d especially love feedback from people into auteur-driven cinema, festival films, visual storytelling, etc.

If anyone’s open to checking it out and leaving a review/comment, I’d really appreciate it and I’m also happy to review other projects in return.

About the project: The Bite of Time is a coming-of-age psychological drama told entirely through a three-way split screen following a young woman (Meline) after finding her first white hair. She unravels and is pulled back into the orbit of her two former best friends. She is forced to confront the seductive danger of staying young and the irreversible physical price of refusing to grow.

https://app.decentralized.pictures/project/69ff9326e15754b80b0aa13f

Thank you! <3 Kim

Title: The Bozo Dojo

Genre: Comedy

Format: tv pilot

Page length: 31

Logline: An autistic comedian absent-mindedly navigates the egos and drugs of Denver's most underperforming comedy club.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/13NnT-doMDylimcXmNcJiGWZ8VCWDQvH1/view?usp=sharing

Specific concerns: I'm not stoked on the title but can't think of anything else. Also the logline probably needs work if anyone has feedback on that. But in terms of writing how is it? This is the first screenplay I wrote and I haven't really gone back and proper edited and rewritten it before. Also are the scene directions stuff right?

so what next?

Thanks for reading!

So me and a bunch of my friends recently started working on a low budget fantasy movie project together.I got tasked as being screenwriter and writing the main story and I wanted to hear honest opinions from other people about the story idea and if it sounds interesting or too generic.

The movie has a dark medieval style aesthetic and starts as a political war story between two kingdoms. The important thing is that it is NOT supposed to immediately become a giant action fantasy movie. Most of the first half is focused on politics, character conflicts, tension between kingdoms and slowly building dread.

The story follows two kings at war. One of them is an older king who genuinely cares about his people. His son, Prince, is the main character and the “hero” of the story. The other king is much colder and crueler and rules alongside his right hand man, who starts as a morally questionable character but slowly changes throughout the story.

So by now it just seems like a very generic move script.A war betwen two countries.One is evil one on is good.But that is what i want,i want for it to seem basic at first even tho at the end it will be more than that.It will be about the message of doing good at the cost of your own good.

The movie opens with soldiers entering caves after reports of strange killings. They are guided by a miner who claims something unnatural is living down there. All of them die, but the audience never fully sees what killed them. This is supposed to foreshadow the danger that is slowly approaching the world.

After that, the story focuses on the war between the kingdoms.prince is shown to be a talented commander, but he is also exhausted by war and slowly losing faith in it. Early in the movie his father tells him a quote that becomes the main theme of the film. He tells him that the life of a true hero is usually hard, cruel and short, but real heroes still choose it because it is the right thing to do. This quote later foreshadows princes death near the end of the movie.

As the war continues, villages begin getting attacked by mysterious creatures. At first they are only rumors, then destroyed villages are discovered, and eventually both kingdoms realize the monsters are real. The two kings organize a temporary alliance because the monsters threaten both sides.

One thing I really wanted to do differently is make the monsters feel like a slowly growing disaster instead of just “fantasy enemies.” A lot of scenes focus more on fear, silence, empty villages and confusion rather than constant fighting.

During the alliance, Prince and Righthand are forced to fight together. Righthand slowly starts respecting him and questioning his own morals and loyalty to the evil king becouse when the alliace was being made he was the one who suggested to king that they should betray the other kingdom when the monsters are finnished. Meanwhile the evil king’s son second prince becomes more unstable and cruel because he constantly wants his father’s approval and keeps failing to earn it.

Near the end of the story, after the monsters are nearly defeated, the evil king betrays the alliance and attacks the weakened good kingdom. prince dies fighting as a hero, fulfilling the quote from the beginning of the movie. Righthand realizes the destruction he helped create and ends up killing himself out of guilt. In the end, the evil king actually wins.

The main message of the movie is basically that true heroes often suffer, fail or die young, but still choose to do good because it is the right thing to do.

So yea it seems basic at first.Its just two enemies finding peace to fight common enemy but at the end its not actualy about that.the monsters are not the real final twist,the humans are.There is also a lot i left out and did not talk about here like the second prince who will have entire arc on his own.

We already started getting costumes and props and are trying to make the atmosphere feel serious despite the low budget.

So yeah, I’d genuinely like honest opinions .Is it too basic,do i need to change something,does the final twist and message of the movie make up for the basic start.Please be honest,thanks for reading.