[QCRIT] BETH DOES IT ALL, women's fiction, 77k, v1
Hi all! Would love feedback on the below. I've already sent out a dozen or so of these but now realize I should have passed this through the pubtips critique line first. :)
Thank you!!
Dear Agent Name,
(Brief personalization) I’d love to offer BETH DOES IT ALL for your consideration.
Beth Baker, harried wife and mom of two, isn’t quite sure what’s missing from her life - why her friends seem to be able to tread water so skillfully in the sea that is family, career, and self-confidence, while she’s desperately searching for a life preserver.
She has some theories, however: if she had a job she could brag about on LinkedIn, if she had more money, if she had more sex, if she had more freedom - then she’d know how to be happy. It’s too bad that the path she chose doesn’t seem to be heading in that direction.
Beth is ecstatic, then, to be given a chance to live the path not taken - a “Life B” complete with all the things she’s missing back home - thanks to an ambitious fairy godmother. She can come and go between lives as she wants, but there’s a catch: she’ll have to eventually decide which life to stay in permanently.
It was always Beth’s intention to choose her real life - her family is there, after all - but as she is drawn more and more into the fantasy of Life B, her resolve weakens. Will she discover the secret to happiness before it’s too late? Or will she end up losing what actually mattered in the first place?
BETH DOES IT ALL is a women’s fiction novel complete at 77,000 words. It combines the exploration of motherhood and identity of All Fours with the observational, slightly neurotic, and humorous vibes of the late great Sophie Kinsella’s novels.
I’m a mom of two young boys/tornadoes who once innocently ripped off my favorite chapter of The Hobbit for a second grade writing assignment. This would be my debut novel.
Thank you for your time and consideration.
Sincerely,
My Name