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Title: The Greenwood Incident

Format: Feature

Genres: Horror/ Thriller

Logline: After a government containment failure, a strained group of friends spiral into vicious paranoia in a remote california mountain home as an entity hides among them wearing human form.

Feedback Concerns: This is the first couple
pages of my story. I’m interested in hearing if the beginning gives just enough urgency while leaving room for mystery and if the transition to the party is still interesting enough to keep you invested to see the eventual unravel.

The Greenwood Incident

Title: The Greenwood Incident

Format: Feature

Page Length: 91 pages 

Draft Status: 2nd Draft

Genre(s): Horror/Thriller 

Logline: A birthday party at a remote California mountain home spirals into vicious chaos after a violent stabbing fractures a group of estranged teens, soon they realize the night has been long compromised by something inhuman.

I’m interested in hearing any thoughts you get from reading this. It’s more of a slow burn but any feedback on pacing and premise will help!

LINK: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1QP6eXCIOXomAfh85dXvmWauQES-2dj7T/view?usp=drivesdk