u/Bookworm7180

Here’s what I would add:

-A playable segment for Hannah and Josh in the Prologue, with Josh before being drunk to show the group as friends more, and Hannah in her room.

-If Beth had let go of Hannah then Beth would be the Wendigo and her as a wendigo would be more brutal.Though there could be different clues for Beth.

-An Ashley Chase scene if she used the scissors on the Psycho.

-Have Matt and Emily not talk about Mike while on a collapsing fire tower.

-More death opportunities in general especially for Mike, Sam and Ashley.

-A segment for Matt with his time in the caves.

-Have a rare Jessica death of Hypothermia.

A segment for either Jessica or Matt (Jessica will have it by default but if She’s not alive then Matt) to make it back to the Lodge though maybe they could be in danger still or they could reflect on whatever happened to them or even talk about Mike and Emily.

-Have Ashley and Chris reflect on whatever happened in the ‘saw traps’ though especially with the gun trap maybe in the safe room or on their walk back to the safe room but in private.

So if Bianca had survived, how would that effect the rest of the books? Also what domain of Hades would her powers be?

I would add a segment for Matt for him exploring around in the mines before he meets up with Jessica.

So for example, if Julia had been intervened by Stefani then maybe her and Stefani would’ve repaired their friendship, Julia could’ve stayed with Erik and Bobby, etc

Also how would you change the POV distribution?

Okay here’s what I would do:

The Lost Hero:

-Have Piper be a a former member of Kronos’s Army and she was at Mount Othrys when it was destroyed. So she would be somewhat afraid that Jason would recognize her but he has amnesia. But she also would have more experience with her powers and maybe she trained with Silena or something.

-Piper would be more experienced in fighting and with knives.

So she would distance herself from him but maybe she has to like spy on him for the giants because of her dad being kidnapped so she joins on the quest .

-Have Leo be the one with the fake memories of his, Piper and Jason’s friendship. Maybe have like one or two flashbacks to show those fake memories.

-Show more demigods that are children of the minor gods.

-Have there not be a rule that A demigod and a god must work together to defeat giants.

-Have there not been a rite of passage to break someone’s heart.

-Have Drew be closer with Silena before she died so she would have felt more betrayed when Silena had been a traitor.

-Have Jason have more wind powers.

-Have Piper have some flashbacks to show what happened at Mount Othrys.

-Have Jason remember Reyna’s name so he could be more confused on who Reyna is.

- Change the prophecy so that it is:

The Heroes of Olympus shall answer the call
To Storm or Fire the World must Fall
Foes bear arms to the doors of death
An oath to make with the final breath

-Have Jason slowly gain his memories throughout the book with him still missing some.

-Have it so Jason is the POV when he meets Thalia instead of Leo. With it just being Jason and Thalia without Leo being there. Have it be a more emotional moment.

-Instead of Thalia separating from the group because Leo didn’t control his powers have it so that the bridge doesn’t be destroyed and so that she stays with the trio and Hedge. And this is so that Thalia would have more page time and with her brother so she and Jason could bond more.

-Have Piper and Jason just be friends and not be in a relationship with Jason being confused as to why she’s avoiding him. With Jason making attempts to be her friend.

-Have Piper and Jason not be in a relationship.

-With Leo also being confused as to why the two of them have gotten distant. And when she’s revealed as a traitor she would have to earn her trust back through out the rest of the books and they would be distrustful of her.

-Have Leo have a character arc though out the books that you don’t have to be in a relationship to be happy and learning to love himself more.

-Piper would have information of The Giants Plans.

-Have Clear limitations of Pipers Powers.

-Have Thalia and Jason work together to defeat Enceladus.

-Have Jason seeing Heras True form have more consequences with him being blinded and has to learn how to ‘see’ maybe using the wind or something.

-Have Jason keep his coin.

-Have an Annabeth POV as a flashback as to what happened when Percy disappeared and her reaction to that as it was happening.

-Have Thalia stay at Camp Half Blood to spend more time with her Brother and renounces her title as a huntress of Artemis because that would have her move around and that spending time with Jason is more important.

-So when Jason dies have him be resurrected by something other than Piper waking him up.

-Leo not being the Head Counselor of the Hephaestus Cabin.

-Piper still beats Drew.

-Have Nico be mentioned of having his father meeting him for something.

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The Son of Neptune:

-Have Roman gods be more respected, though I’m not really sure if that’s accurate to the Romans though correct me if I’m wrong.

-Have the Romans be more duty oriented.

-introduce a daughter of Neptune with her being more Political.

-Have there be shrines for the Roman gods.

-Have Hazel be uncultured in stuff.

-Have Percy spend more time at Camp Jupiter and what’s life is like there and in New Rome.

-Have a lot more Adults in the Legion.

-Have a Nico POV of him being captured.

-Have Thalia show up at the end with Tyson and Show Thalia meeting Reyna and her reaction to there being a daughter of Neptune and a daughter of Pluto.

-Have Hazel be aged up more to franks Age.

-Have Octavian be more threatening and manipulative without making outbursts.

-Have Porphyrion not be defeated by the border gods head

-I’ll add more in the comments when I think of something that I forgotten.

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The Mark of Athena:

-Have Jason not be knocked out by the brick.

-Have Jason be the POV when he meets Reyna.

-With Reyna’s reaction to him being blind.

-Piper informing the rest of the group of some of The Giants Plans with Nico being captured.

-Thalia leaving with the group when they leave New Rome.

-With the daughter of Neptune staying to help Reyna and vowing to Percy to spend more time after the War.

-Have an Octavian and Reyna POV showing Octavians manipulation and the political side of things.

-Have there not be a law against going to the Acient lands.

-Have a Leo POV showing what’s it like to be possessed by the eliodonion.

-Have Leo not be in a love triangle with Hazel and Frank.

-Have there been more consequences to Leo bombing New Rome, with Hazel, Frank, and Percy hating him or disliking him a bunch.

-Have Piper and Jason be on slightly good terms.

-Have Piper have a blowgun with those darts.

-Have the encounter with Narcissus and Echo have more impact on Leo.

-Have there be more of a Debate on saving Nico or not.

-With Percy and Hazel obviously defending him. -Frank siding with Hazel.
-Jason concerned that it’s a trap and that it’s a risk though not fully against it.
-I don’t really know about Thalia and Annabeth.

Have there also be a debate on The Prophecy.
Have a Reyna POV of her deciding to leave to the Ancient Lands and a couple chapters of her journey there.

-Though the biggest change I would make is that Jason and Piper would fall in Tartarus.

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The House of Hades:

-Piper and Jason would bond more.

Jason would rely on Piper more because of his sight.

-Thalia would be worried about Jason.

-Show some more leadership of Annabeth or Percy.

-Nico and Hazel bonding more.

-Have more chapters of Reyna’s journey and losing Scorpio.

-Show more of Hazel and Thalia with Learning the Mist.

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The Blood of Olympus:

-Instead of Piper and Jason going to the island instead have Hazel, Annabeth, and Frank.

Have Piper talk with Annabeth about Tartarus and the same thing with Jason and Thalia.

Have a Frank POV when he meets his family and have Hazel with him too.

Have Gaia actually wake up and that’s when the gods help. Also have each of the group contribute with defeating Gaia.

-I’ll add more later in the comments.

If I could rewrite it then I have Thalia to also show up in The Battle of The Labyrinth to help with defending the camp at the end of the book. She could also show up earlier in The Last Olympian and instead of getting a statue falling on her( I could be wrong) she helps fight Kronos with Percy.

In Heroes Of Olympus:

In The Lost Hero: Instead of Leo burning the Bridge that separated Leo, Piper, and Jason from Thalia, nothing would happen. Instead Thalia would stay with the group for the rest of the book with even helping Jason defeat Enceladus. We could also have more bonding between the two siblings and try to make up for all that time that was lost. She would even go with them to stay at camp half for a while.

In the Son of Neptune: Maybe she shows up with Tyson to help in that battle.

In Blood of Olympus: She could stay with Nico, Reyna, and Hedge to help with the Athena Parthenos though they would have to take longer breaks since they would have an additional person and she helps Reyna defeat Orion and makes it to Camp .

I have a couple examples:

Hazel, Frank, and maybe Percy should have been mad at Leo for Bombing New Rome.

Leo and Jason slightly distrusting Piper after she worked for Enceladus(though it was for her father’s safety).

Jason and Percy over Leadership.

Hazel’s Earth Powers being dangerous for the group since their enemy is Gaia and that she might manipulate Hazel and her powers.

So what I would want explored more is:

1. Jason’s life at Camp Jupiter before he was swapped.

2. What Annabeth and Percy felt about Tartarus in their own POV.

3. What Jason felt about new Rome and Reyna.

And what I want expanded on is:

1. Gaias fight so that each of the seven contribute to the fight.

2. More page time for Thalia and Jason being siblings.

I think that Charles and Silena’s relationship, Clarrise and Silena’s friendship, and life at camp from a day to day basis.

If so then what POVs would you add?
I would add Annabeth, Luke, and maybe Nico.
This is my Day 5 of doing this.

If so then whose POV or POvs would you add?
I would add Annabeth, Thalia and/or Bianca.

If so then what POVs would you add? For me I would add Clarisse , Grover and Annabeth.
Or do you think it should stay the same with just Percy’s?

If so then what POV would you add?
Or do you think it’s fine as it is?
Also how would distribute the POVs for the book like for example have Annabeth be the POV for the time at Medusa’s and the bus ride to there and at the Arch.

Sorry for being late

I would have Reyna not join the Hunters and have her just stay in New Rome