u/Brief-Jellyfish-4855

If anybody is willing, I would love to have someone come and critique my story.

It is a multi POV novel about a group of sisters who are fighting each other for the throne of their father. This first chapter is written from the perspective of a servant who has obtained attention far greater than he desires.

I would love to get feedback on not only technical things, but also knowing if the story itself seems interesting, and if it hooks the reader. If not, what could I do to better? Also I would love to know if anyone would like to see more of this story, due to the fact that this chapter is only one POV from a multitude of them.

Thanks in advance!

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1D2BrPmbWqrqUMJpptLdN1e5LFJZAkiJLS_CVkPWLN6I/edit?tab=t.0