Я приеду в Кыргызстан в июне из Латвии с четырьмя друзьями. Мы хотим отправиться в 4-дневный конный тур. Одна компания говорит 300 долларов с человека. Это слишком дорого? Это только за тур, у нас уже транспорт. Кто-нибудь знает местного гида? Я неплохо говорю по-русски и смогу переводить для своих друзей, которые не знают русского.
Added in my housekeeping, tried to rebalance word building and worked back in the antagonist. Main concern is not mentioning the antag until 3rd main paragraph is too late, but the 1st paragraph was feeling way too crowded when I put him in there. Open to any and all feedback. Hoping to start sending this out soonish.
link to previous: https://www.reddit.com/r/PubTips/comments/1sljjje/qcrit_in_gods_absence_adult_horror_87k_words/
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Dear X,
IN GOD’S ABSENCE is a 87,000-word horror novel that blends Appalachian folklore with cult psychology and religious fanaticism. It will appeal to fans of Daryl Gregory’s Revelator and Andy Davidson’s The Boatman's Daughter.
In his small Appalachian community, where demonic beasts stalk the nights and changelings wear the skin of missing townsfolk, even Azazel is considered a monster. All because of a deformity considered to be a mark of the Devil. But when a voice appears inside Azazel’s head, claiming to be an Angel and granting him visions of the future, his fortunes change.
Azazel starts to publicly announce attacks before they happen and identify individuals replaced by changelings. A militant group of followers quickly forms around him, using his visions to purge their community of monsters. For the first time in his life Azazel is loved. Needed. Worshipped.
But when the visions and voices suddenly stop, Azazel’s position teeters on the brink of collapse. Without his prophecies the people lose faith. Families are left defenseless against the horrors of the night, and neighbor distrusts neighbor without Azazel’s forces to hunt down the changelings among them. Meanwhile, Father Haggerty, a priest overshadowed by Azazel, rallies his own forces to crush the “false prophet.”
In fear of losing the only love and respect he’s ever known, and not wanting the town to devolve into utter chaos, Azazel embarks down an increasingly dark path to ensure his predictions come true, even if he has to bring them into reality himself.
The town demands blood, and he will give it to them.
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