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I went to see this years ago for my sister's sixth birthday.

And I was just starting high school at the time, so I really had no interest in seeing it other than it just being something to do for a random weekend.

But I at least expected to be entertained. The film ended up coming off as very bland.

Nothing much really happened and I couldn't even tell you what the characters wanted. It felt very first drafty to me.

Although, it did have some bones.

Like the super people, like Elsa. That's entire movie.

What if, those people were the ones who accidentally killed Elsa and Anna's parents.

After we learn their parents went to travel there for cure, but the super people got the wrong impression and one of them caused a storm that sank the ship.

That's the big twist.

And we also learn the super-powered gene is universal so Anna has powers too, but hasn't unlocked them.

And after learning about this Anna gains her fire powers, and looks to punish these people under kingdom law.

And Elsa has to stop Anna.

And we get sister vs sister.

But the film would be about forgiveness and integration.

That's originally what I thought they were gonna do with the second one.

And it may be little dark, but it would've been masked by the lightness of Olaf and the rest of the supporting characters anyway.

But that's just how I would've done it for sure.

Cost me 2 jobs in the past month or so.

Just awful people to be around and I keep letting my guard down around them because I'm an idiot.

God gave me the worst set of authority possible.

I had one job interview they were supposed to take me to, but they refused because they wanted me at another job I didn't even want.

Then, I went to the other job, and the hours were too early, and I told management it wasn't possible that I could do this job because it conflicts within my rides schedule, and my parents got mad.

But it conflicts with their schedule. They never liked taking me to work at all. Doesn't matter if it's in the morning or evening. They don't like doing anything.

And I can't walk because they won't let me walk.

I'm about be 21 years old.

And I'm still at my parents house being talked down too. Insulted.

I genuinely wish my parents the absolute worst outcome imaginable because they don't deserve to have anything good in their life.

I've been re-watching show. And the movie to me wasn't bad. It just wasn't a blockbuster story. The story they went with was meant for TV. And the fact they fast-tracked it to theaters, probably didn't leave any room for a re-write.

But I like to write in my freetime sometimes to expand my portfolio in case I want to pursue some sort of writing career. And just wanted to know if yall would dig this concept.

Instead of the neighborhood on countdown to move because of a mall.

What if? They actually do move. the entire community to bigger city. With skyscrapers. That's cleaner. Our of their element. And their not used to it.

Helga can't stalk Arnold normally.

The kids don't have a vacant lot or ball park to play in, because those places are taken by other kids who don't want to get along with Arnold and the gang from the little city.

The rest of the community have to work their old jobs, but like in a tighter, more polished way.

And all of this happened because THE SUIT (which is one of Gerald's urban tales, known for making outlandish deals to make himself wealthy) has signed take over Hillwood, and like revamp it. Forcing the neighborhood to move to hotel in a bigger city while their city is being designed to LOOK like this city.

And none of the community is into this.

Turns out. The plan was never was to revamp the city. The Suit is actually tearing it down looking for something that gives a man undisputed wealth and power under the Hillwood.

And it's up to Arnold and the Kids to stop him from tearing down their neighborhood to look for this thing.

That was just me thinking out of the top of my head. Because Arnold's parents are adventurers. Maybe that could've tied into the first movie.

And Arnold has to learn he can’t fix everything, and accepting loss doesn't mean giving up.

That's just idea had for the first film.

And my opening would've been The 4th Graders VS. Wolfgang and the 5th graders. With 4th graders losing after Arnold tries run for home plate.

Setting the tone for the film. And giving a general audience a sense of who these characters are.

I personally think we've been making the right moves.

Putting us in decent position to get back to the post-season

They may like you. Love your writing. And can see the movie. But there are lingering problems keeping the project from being greenlit.

1. You may have way too many characters in the script.

This won't always be a big issue later in your career, but when you're first getting your foot through the door keep character count low.

2. Logic gaps.

This is a bigger one. Sometimes these slip through the cracks and hit the big screen. But eliminate these from your script pronto.

3. Formatting properly.

If you cannot format a script correctly, no one will take you seriously. In today's world, we have the internet, use it to your advantage.

Let's go! Hope Collin has a big season.

I feel like it was much better months ago. I personally use it to fix typos and make suggestions on how scene could be better.

But lately I've felt its pose is a lot weaker than before. Very repetitive. Even with a ban amplifier I use, it continues to do the same things over and over.

No matter I what try, I can't get to listen to basic things. It's very annoying because I like using this. It makes my ideas pop a little more, and it expands my voice on the page.

Well, at least, it did.

I just wondering if anyone is having issues or maybe I just need to learn how to prompt better.

I have templates for everything, so it should follow very strict rules.

I feel like it was much better months ago. I personally use it to fix typos and make suggestions on how a story could be better.

But lately I've felt its pose is a lot weaker than before. Very repetitive. Even with a ban amplifier I use, it continues to do the same things over and over.

No matter I what try, I can't get to listen to basic things. It's very annoying because I like using this. It makes my ideas pop a little more, and it expands my voice on the page.

Well, at least, it did.

I just wondering if anyone is having issues or maybe I just need to learn how to prompt better.

Fuck all the numbers. All logic. We going.

I'm yielding it into existence.

Obviously Seattle is getting their super sonics back.

So what shall Vegas be called?

I've seen some mock drafts have us taking him.

I'm for it if he's there.

If you love this, truly, get off the post. Because I don’t want to bore you with negativity or anything like that.

Especially, if you have a manager/agent, and you’re steps away from making your dream come true.

So, today, I woke up pretty excited because something was in the works for me. Finally.

This year alone: I finally made the STAGE32 lookbook.

Got told by an executive, i am a one of one writer, and got recommended to the short script fund competition.

I was so confident in my script, I’d been firing on cylinders this year, I honestly thought I’d make the Semi’s without an issue.

Then I got the news I didn’t make it. And not only that, based on the feedback, it seems they didn’t actually want my version of the script made. They wanted their version.

Which, in all honesty, pissed me off, then I just got discouraged.

I’m on the younger side, I know my limits with most things.

I’ve gotten two managers to read my material. I’m very proud of that.

And I almost won a screenplay competition.

That’s all my accolades in 7 years of writing. And I know people wait way longer to have their shot.

But I’m don’t know if i can continue after this year. I’m from the very Deep South, I’ve loved movies since I was little kid, and when I decided to write movies, I thought I’d made one of the more better decisions of my life.

But the truth is: I’m still in the Deep South. I’m not in the rooms to make connections I need to make. Paying to enter competitions and not make it past the first round is not ideal, anymore.

And i just don’t have enough friends to shoot by myself. Which I would’ve done otherwise.

I guess I’m just venting because it’s really hard in this industry to make it.

And sometimes you’ve got to accept, that you’re meant to do other things.

And I’m just posting here to hear some other stories from you, if you’re still pursuing this? Thinking about putting the pencil in the drawer?