u/CousinJacksGhost

*Your eyes*

Verdant hazels stare moonlight down into the pit of me, Illuminating the grove of a sun-worn face. Flimsy pinewood hearts reach for reassuring bedrock, Daring to dream roots in an unfamiliar place.

Like autumn leaves carried away in the currents of that vast ocean Never to return to their solstice home, The winds from your gaze scattered my branches bare, And all defense gone.

Fortitudes crack and harden in a side glance of suggestion. Bodies writhe and spark on a naked shore, storming against the grain. Lips restlessly pulling sap from the heartwood, Nourishing the soil again.

There was a place below, with flick ember secreted; Needled hollows never doused by summer sadness. The brush of passion's white heat caught there, Burning up the whole earth in madness.

This is intended for someone very special, new, romantic. To be handwritten and sent. Played with this for only a day so far and seeking feedback on rhyming structure and clarity of imagery most specifically. Also any points where the reading/words feels tangled? Does it need a 5th stanza?

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Hi everyone, I am seeking some advice, ideas, or maybe just some perspectives for my wife. She is a really talented geologist but has been out of work for about 6 years now raising our kids- and to be honest she is a wonderful mother and the glue of our family.

She has a few years of industry experience as well as a masters and a PhD in economic geology. Her topics of expertise are on the geochemistry side but more applied (fieldwork, labwork). I don't doubt her technical ability at all but she has super low self-esteem and rock bottom confidence. She thinks she has been out of the loop too long and she worries about being an imposter trying to come back to the industry.

The way she talks about wanting to work is really a seesaw between having the desire to be more than being a mother but not brave enough to actually send in applications. Probably she does not have the confidence to showcase her skills or talk about herself in a professional way. I think she really needs a kind of a consulting or analyst role where she can work a few days a week to start and build up her confidence but I don't know what kind of sector that might be in, or how to go looking for it? I'm asking because I want to help her, but I don't want to be too pushy.