I would be extremely grateful if someone could help me with my college essay❤️
I work with a college consultant and he’s been really discouraging. I would like another perspective! My essay certainly isn’t perfect, but I feel like it’s stronger than he’s making it out to be 😭 I just want to make sure it is understandable from someone who doesn’t know me :) My top schools are Shryers honors college and UMich. My dms r open!
Some of my stats:
Gpa- 3.74
APs- 8 (4s and 5s on all)
Honors-7
College in high school- 3
Speech & Debate: 1st Place, PHSSL State Qualifiers (2026); 3rd Place, PHSSL State Championships—Oral Interpretation (2026); 2nd Place, Mars Invitational (2026); 2nd Place, Hampton Invitational (2026); State Semifinalist, News Broadcasting (2025). Academic: AP Research Score of 5. Leadership & Service: Selected as Student Body School Board Representative, a newly created Student Council position; President, Rotary Interact Club; Vice President, Multicultural Club; founded an annual bake sale benefiting North Hills Community Outreach, raising $2,000+ and doubling club membership. Odyssey of the Mind: 3-time HS regional champion and state qualifier in problem solving. Color Guard: Selected as Captain for two consecutive seasons. Fountain of Youth Beauty Academy: Youngest student in cohort; completed 200 in-person hours and online coursework toward nail technician licensure; earned highest final exam grade.