New Homebrew Idea, Need Recommendations/Criticism
The Wailing Locusts are a Space Marine Chapter created during the 21st Founding, formed from an unstable and highly unpredictable gene-seed line of Jaghatai Khan that produces extreme recruitment attrition and psychological volatility among its warriors. Operating from their mobile flagship and fortress monastery, the Sunderer’s Watch, they maintain a unified, constantly mobile fleet that never divides into separate task groups.
Their full fleet consists of, 1 Legatus-class Battle Barge, 6 Strike Cruisers, 2 Vanguard Cruisers, 8 Hunter-class Destroyers, 6 Nova-class Frigates, 6 Gladius-class Frigates, and 1 Mechanicus Forgeship forming a balanced strike force capable of sustained void warfare and rapid planetary assault operations.
In combat, they are defined by extreme speed and overwhelming shock assault tactics, striking with rapid mechanized advances before collapsing into sudden, brutal close-quarters engagements, often reinforced by Dreadnought drop pod strikes used to destroy key enemy infrastructure before immediate exploitation. Their philosophy is intensely pragmatic: momentum is sacred, results matter more than ceremony or glory, and war is treated as direct, efficient work carried out by loose, mission-bound “posse”-like brotherhoods where reputation is earned through performance and survival rather than rank or formal structure.
They show little interest in prolonged occupation or governance, instead focusing on breaking enemy forces and moving on, with Imperial Guard formations typically handling civilian evacuation while the Chapter concentrates solely on eliminating hostile threats and creating safe corridors through violence.
On the battlefield they are feared for their predatory, near-silent aggression and sudden explosive violence, but their genetic instability can trigger catastrophic psychological breaks, resulting in uncontrolled wailing, crying rage, and violent emotional collapse rather than disciplined battle fury. To cope with this, they employ strict internal discipline and controlled release of aggression against lesser threats, while suppressing all such breakdowns during engagements with truly dangerous foes. This instability, combined with severe recruitment failure rates, strict culling of aspirants, communication difficulties, and breakdowns in unit cohesion under stress, ensures the Chapter remains small in number but devastating in effect—an unpredictable, fast-moving force of relentless momentum and tightly controlled brutality that is as unsettling to allies as it is lethal to enemies.
(Edit: the chapter does have a light cowboy/frontier vibe, as i based them specifically off the now extinct rocky mountain locust)
This homebrew is nowhere near finished, i just need to know if this is a good start or what might need to change.