u/EastClassroom4022

New Homebrew Idea, Need Recommendations/Criticism

The Wailing Locusts are a Space Marine Chapter created during the 21st Founding, formed from an unstable and highly unpredictable gene-seed line of Jaghatai Khan that produces extreme recruitment attrition and psychological volatility among its warriors. Operating from their mobile flagship and fortress monastery, the Sunderer’s Watch, they maintain a unified, constantly mobile fleet that never divides into separate task groups.

Their full fleet consists of, 1 Legatus-class Battle Barge, 6 Strike Cruisers, 2 Vanguard Cruisers, 8 Hunter-class Destroyers, 6 Nova-class Frigates, 6 Gladius-class Frigates, and 1 Mechanicus Forgeship forming a balanced strike force capable of sustained void warfare and rapid planetary assault operations.

In combat, they are defined by extreme speed and overwhelming shock assault tactics, striking with rapid mechanized advances before collapsing into sudden, brutal close-quarters engagements, often reinforced by Dreadnought drop pod strikes used to destroy key enemy infrastructure before immediate exploitation. Their philosophy is intensely pragmatic: momentum is sacred, results matter more than ceremony or glory, and war is treated as direct, efficient work carried out by loose, mission-bound “posse”-like brotherhoods where reputation is earned through performance and survival rather than rank or formal structure.

They show little interest in prolonged occupation or governance, instead focusing on breaking enemy forces and moving on, with Imperial Guard formations typically handling civilian evacuation while the Chapter concentrates solely on eliminating hostile threats and creating safe corridors through violence.

On the battlefield they are feared for their predatory, near-silent aggression and sudden explosive violence, but their genetic instability can trigger catastrophic psychological breaks, resulting in uncontrolled wailing, crying rage, and violent emotional collapse rather than disciplined battle fury. To cope with this, they employ strict internal discipline and controlled release of aggression against lesser threats, while suppressing all such breakdowns during engagements with truly dangerous foes. This instability, combined with severe recruitment failure rates, strict culling of aspirants, communication difficulties, and breakdowns in unit cohesion under stress, ensures the Chapter remains small in number but devastating in effect—an unpredictable, fast-moving force of relentless momentum and tightly controlled brutality that is as unsettling to allies as it is lethal to enemies.

(Edit: the chapter does have a light cowboy/frontier vibe, as i based them specifically off the now extinct rocky mountain locust)

This homebrew is nowhere near finished, i just need to know if this is a good start or what might need to change.

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u/EastClassroom4022 — 3 days ago

Finished Homebrew Page/Veteran Scheme

The Umbral Striges

The Umbral Striges are a Chapter of the 15th Founding, descended from the gene-line of Jaghatai Khan. They operate primarily within the Calixis Sector of Segmentum Obscurus as a fleet-based, fast-strike Chapter. Their warfare is not centered on holding ground or winning set-piece battles, but on breaking the systems that sustain warband war efforts, like supply chains, mercenary networks, xenos logistics, and Chaos-aligned support structures.

Chapter Structure and Warfare

The Chapter is led by the High Bek, who commands all Brotherhoods and fleet operations. Below him, each Brotherhood is led by a Bek, who functions as an independent battlefield commander with significant autonomy. Brotherhoods are flexible warhosts built for mobility and rapid response, able to adapt quickly across void and planetary engagements without reliance on rigid central coordination.

Origin: Hestia

The Chapter originated from Hestia, a frozen industrial deathworld locked in perpetual winter. It was a world of tundra plains, buried manufactorum ruins, and constant lethal storms that erased visibility and movement across its surface. Its human populations once survived in isolated industrial strongholds and nomadic steppe clans. Among them were the owl hunters, elite trackers whose methods of silent pursuit and survival in whiteout conditions influenced the Chapter’s later traditions. Hestia is no longer under Chapter control and now exists only as a lost origin world within their history.

Chapter Culture / Philosophy

The warriors of the Umbral Striges continued the White Scars tradition of the Virtuous Pursuits, believing that a warrior who existed only for war would eventually become little different from the monsters he hunted. Across the Chapter fleet, Battle-Brothers devoted themselves to artistic and spiritual disciplines during periods between campaigns. Poetry, calligraphy, scrimshaw carving, steppe-instrument music, oral storytelling, and most importantly owlry (the art of owl hunting) were especially respected among the Brotherhoods, particularly traditions inherited from Hestia’s nomadic clans and Owl Hunter circles. Many Umbral Striges also engrave the names of great slain enemies or lost brothers into bone, horn, or metal taken from campaign sites, creating long memory-totems carried throughout decades of crusade. Among senior Beks and Stormseers, strategic cartography itself became a Virtuous Pursuit. Some spent years constructing immense hand-drawn war maps charting the hidden relationships between xenos syndicates, smuggling routes, mercenary fleets, and Chaos incursions across the Calixis Sector. These maps were treated as both works of art and sacred instruments of war.

Combat Style / Battlefield Identity

The Umbral Striges fight as a fast, systemic strike force. Their doctrine emphasizes extreme mobility, rapid deployment, and layered attacks that target both enemy forces and the infrastructure supporting them. Rather than prolonged engagements, they favor short, decisive operations that destabilize entire warzones before full resistance can form. Their hallmark is the transition from silence to sudden violence. Operations often begin with reconnaissance and disruption, followed by precise strikes against key logistical points, and culminating in rapid assault actions that collapse remaining enemy resistance.

Fleet Composition

The Umbral Striges are a fully fleet-based Chapter. Their fleet is built for rapid repositioning, long-range deployment, and sustained independent operations without reliance on fixed planetary infrastructure. Their vessels support both void warfare and rapid planetary insertion, enabling them to strike at multiple points within a system in quick succession.

Fleet elements are used not only for transport and combat, but also as command hubs for coordinating simultaneous disruption campaigns across multiple targets within a single warzone.

Chapter Fleet (Section 11)

1x Legatus-class Battle Barge (Flagship) “Benediction”
1x Avenger-class Battle Barge
6x Strike Cruisers
2x Vanguard Cruisers
8x Hunter-class Destroyers
8x Nova-class Frigates
7x Gladius-class Frigates
1x Forgeship

Relics

The Umbral Striges recovered a Saturnine dreadnought chassis during the fall of Forge World Khepra-Magnus, pulling it from a sealed vault deep beneath the oldest parts of the forge. It was buried so far down that even the Mechanicus records around it were incomplete or missing, and no one in the Chapter fully understood what they were looking at when it was first uncovered. As the forge world collapsed under the Dark Mechanicum assault, the ruling Magos handed the chassis over during evacuation. He wouldn’t explain where it came from in any detail, only that its origin was forbidden and that it wasn’t ready for battle. It’s currently being worked on by Archmagos Hester Vhal on Voss Ultair, and the process is slow and uncertain. For the Chapter, it’s less a weapon right now and more a strange, half-finished relic, powerful, old, and still not fully understood.

The chapter takes inspiration from Kazakh and Kyrgyz eagle hunters from the steppes of Asia.

u/EastClassroom4022 — 12 days ago

Some help thinking of a chapter sigil?

My wip chapter is called the Pale Striges, with a khazakstani eagle (owl in this case) hunter theme. Their shtik is they target xenos factions or cartels that supply, cooperate with, or provide mercenaries for chaos warbands. Their goal is the immediate extinction of those species. I cannot for the life of me think of an intresting symbol that isnt just an owl (or would that be best?) that represents what their goal/theme is. I would love some suggestions.

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u/EastClassroom4022 — 16 days ago

The Punitive Sons are a Loyalist Adeptus Astartes Chapter of the 13th Founding, their primogenitor unknown, and they are defined by an unshakable devotion to the Imperium coupled with a strong preference for operational autonomy. They maintain a balanced internal discipline, granting squads greater independence in smaller engagements while enforcing centralized control in large-scale wars. Unusually for Astartes, they are deeply compassionate toward Imperial civilians, treating them with care and respect, though they accept that limited loss may be necessary to preserve far greater numbers. They revere the Emperor as a god of peace, love, and safety whose ultimate vision requires the destruction of a cruel and suffering universe, and they see themselves as the “consequence of evil,” existing to ensure that those who align with Chaos or cruelty are inevitably eradicated. In war, the Punitive Sons employ a precise and unforgiving two-doctrine system. Against small xenos factions or cartel-like organizations supporting Chaos through resources, mercenaries, or logistics, they deploy squad-based disruption forces to systematically destroy supply lines, factories, and infrastructure until the enemy can be eliminated by Imperial Guard forces. Against larger or high-threat enemies, they conduct structured phased warfare: eliminating patrols and scouts to blind enemy awareness, engaging in controlled combat to shape the battlefield, deploying Dreadnoughts via drop pod into rear infrastructure targets, and recovering those assets before unleashing coordinated long-range missile barrages. These bombardments are followed by rapid insertion of Marines via high-speed vehicles into brutal close-quarters melee to finish remaining resistance. Their battlefield identity reflects this doctrine—feared and widely respected, they fight with merciless precision, often deciding battles before the enemy realizes they are under attack. Their squads operate with tight cohesion and strong internal bonds, communicating minimally and executing with surgical efficiency. They favor extremes of engagement distance, either striking from afar with overwhelming missile fire or closing to point-blank range with melta and chain weapons. After battle, they recover fallen wargear and vehicles and coordinate with the Astra Militarum to secure the area, withdrawing in an orderly fashion if defeat is unavoidable. As a fleet-based Chapter, the Punitive Sons possess a balanced and mobile naval force capable of sustained multi-theater warfare. Their fleet is centered around the Legatus-class Battle Barge “Benediction” supported by an Avenger-class Battle Barge, six Strike Cruisers, two Vanguard Cruisers, eight Hunter-class Destroyers, eight Nova-class Frigates, seven Gladius-class Frigates, and a dedicated Forgeship.

Any suggestions or criticism is appreciated. It's still a work in progress so im very open to ideas.

u/EastClassroom4022 — 26 days ago