Would anyone be willing to review my draft of my personal statement and provide feedback? Either attending a top institution or having experience reviewing/former AO would be immensely helpful, especially. Thanks!

Intended Major: ChemE or Material Sci depending on school. Focus on sustainable solutions.

Demographics

• State: Illinois
• Gender: Male
• Ethnicity: Indian
• Income: Upper-middle class
• School: Large public high school

Academics

UW GPA: 3.93

W GPA: 4.49

SAT: 1560 superscore

• 800 Math
• 760 RW

ACT: 35 Composite

• 36 Reading
• 36 Science
• 35 Math
• 35 English

Coursework

Most rigorous schedule available including:

• AP Chemistry
• AP Calculus BC
• AP Computer Science A
• Multiple APs/Honors STEM courses
• 10 APs Total

(Bs in AP Calc BC and Honors Physics junior year)

Awards/Honors

• BPA National Leadership Conference — Top 10 National Finalist (8th Place)
• Science Olympiad State Medalist
• IJAS State Qualifier
• 15 regional Science Olympiad medals so far
• VEX Robotics Worlds Qualifier

Extracurriculars

Violin/Orchestra

• Been playing for 9 years
• Member of school's top orchestra
• Part of music honors society where I've performed in senior homes and helped with local concerts.

Science Olympiad VP of Operations

• Help manage team operations, resources, logistics, and recruitment
• Help oversee 100+ student tryout process

Robotics Leadership

• Vice President of a competitive robotics program
• Helped manage team operations, mentorship, and technical development
• Program achieved record state-level success
• My team went to VEX worlds sophomore year and we made it to division playoffs

Materials Science Research Project

• Co-leading a sustainable materials research project focused on biodegradable UV-protective films for solar energy applications
• Conducting laboratory testing and data analysis
• Working with faculty mentor

Research Internship at local university

• Researching electrocatalysis and carbon-conversion technologies in a university laboratory
• Working with graduate researchers on catalyst evaluation, electrolyzer assembly, and testing

Paid Sustainability Internship

• Selected for paid internship with environmental nonprofit
• Conducting air quality and climate-related research projects
• Collecting and analyzing environmental data for community applications

BPA

• National Top 10 Finalist
• Competed in networking and technology-focused events

Schools:

Ohio State

Texas A&M

Purdue

UIUC

Wisconsin

Case Western

Minnesota

Michigan

Georgia Tech

UCLA

UC Berkley

Northwestern

Cornell

Rice

UT Austin