u/Entire_Hurry_3398

Okay here is an updated version on my last post. Please any feedback would be appreciated:)

Our light illuminated the derelict room just as everyone's voices snapped into a terrified silence. Across from us, a familiar, twitching silhouette stood waiting in the dark.

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u/Entire_Hurry_3398 — 1 day ago

guys please give feedback on my 2 sentence horror to help improve!!

The air inside the dilapidated room was suffocatingly still, dominated by the towering, unblinking presence of the strange man we came to encounter a few weeks ago. He watched us from the corner with a twitching, rigid, stone-faced stare as my friends' chatter snapped into a horrifying, synchronized, eerie silence.

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u/Entire_Hurry_3398 — 3 days ago