u/EvensenFM

idea for a new thriller

hey guys what do u think about my total original work


So ur with ur honey and yur mking out wen the phone rigns.

U anser it n the vioce is "wut r u doing wit my daughter?"

U tell ur girl n she say "my dad is ded".

THEN WHO WAS PHONE?


bro i think it have potential

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u/EvensenFM — 13 days ago

Is my dialogue realistic

I'm trying to write more accurate and realistic dialogue. Do you think this captures the tone and patterns of colloquial speech well? After all, I think I need to have at least some kind of talking in my book between the boobily and the gay sex.

u/EvensenFM — 14 days ago