So I do write...
This is a part of a passion project and a cappella demo of a song I wrote.
I would love a little feedback and I genuinely can't figure the perfect instrument for this
"Nobody can make you feel small" you said
Sitting on my right leg
Chocolate wrappers in coffee mugs
On a couch, it feels like Christmas
Though no one here celebrate
And I made you read the last poem
I chuckled
"That's the dumbest...no second dumbest thing you ever said"
You said
"Don't give those eyes, they precipitate"
Then you started kissing me
When you were halfway out the door
I asked you to say something nice
You said, "I love you"
"Nobody can make you feel small" you said
Sitting on my right leg
Chocolate wrappers in coffee mugs
On a couch, it feels like Christmas
Though no one here celebrate
And I made you read the last poem
I chuckled
"That's the dumbest...no second dumbest thing you ever said"
You said
"Don't give those eyes, they precipitate"
Then you started kissing me
When you were halfway out the door
I asked you to say something nice
You said, "I love you"
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